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An upward 'spending on books' trend during the ten-year period in four European countries


wulanbila16 14 / 7 5  
Feb 2, 2016   #1
A breakdown of the amount of book's expense measured in US dollars in four Europe's countries from 1995 to 2005 is illustrated in the given line graph. Overall, it clearly can be seen that all countries had an upward trend during the ten-year period although Germany and Italy had experienced a fall once. In any case, Germany was the country which had the largest amount of expense over the period.

In the first year, Germany's expense of books stood at 80 that was the largest amount of all countries. It rose gradually to 90 in 1999 and dropped by 5 from 1999 to 2003. In the last year, it increased again by 10. Though Germany had a steady decrease once, it remained to be the first country with the largest amount. As Germany, Italy also had a gradual fall from 1997 to 1999. However, the amount of Italy's spending rose again in the rest of period.

During the ten years, France's expenditure amount increased steadily by 20 dollars. Although Austria had the same pattern as France, it had experienced a constant amount from 1999 to 2000. 2003 witnessed an intersection between Italy and Austria. As a consequence, Austria which had the lowest amount in the beginning of period became the third country having the largest amount of money spent on books in the last year.




anita11 28 / 20 2  
Feb 3, 2016   #2
hello wulan, :)

you are writing is good, but this is a little suggestion for you

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A breakdown of the amount of book's expense (better to put comma in here)
measured in US dollars in four Europe's (European)
... during the ten-year period(comma) although Germany and Italy ...

... that was the largest amount of all countries (try to use other words except amount).
It rose gradually to 90 in 1999 and dropped by 5 from 1999 to 2003. In the last year, it increased again by 10(. Though: it is a conjunction , if you wan to use other world in similar meaning, you can write meanwhile )

the amount of Italy's spending rose again in the rest of (the ) period.

(In addition) 2003 witnessed an intersection between Italy and Austria.


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