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The urban areas should have good traits of rural areas. Issues of living in a large community


HangPham287 1 / -  
Oct 13, 2016   #1
In the present, the vast fields were gradually replaced by large urban areas crowded, and modern. But the gigantic development of urban areas also have advantages as well as disadvantages.

Firstly, the material life of the people living in urban areas are better. The infrastructure of culture, education, health care are better than small village. Secondly, they have access to modern technology, so they learn many things from the world. Thirdly, better job opportunities. More and more urban development means more jobs, it created jobs for many people. While promoting economic development.

Besides, there are also disadvantages such as: People focus on developing urban environment also indirectly polluted by factories, enterprise and noise. In particular, the area reserved for no more trees to create great pressure to the atmosphere, the spirit of the people in urban areas with stress due to pressure of work, no place to relax. And they know their neighbors less.

In my opinion, we need a combination of urban areas with small countryside. Such moderate economic development, both material and spiritual life of the people are better.

andika08 81 / 80 16  
Oct 22, 2016   #2
Hello
You have a good summary
I have some corrections for you

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You have explain more about your body 1 and 2 and conclusion clearly and totally.
For better structure in body paragraph you can firstly paraphrasing the idea, reason, example and brief conclusion.


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