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USE OF CCTV CAMERAS (IELTS ESSAY)


Geenesh 21 / 29  
Jun 30, 2011   #1
The use of close circuit television (CCTV) cameras in streets, stations, shops and other public places has increased rapidly in recent years. Although we are told that these cameras help in the fight against crime, some people are opposed to their use. They believe that everyone has a right to privacy. What are your views?

Today, close circuit television (CCTV) cameras are widely used in a variety of circumstances. They are used in schools, businesses and some other premises in order to monitor the activities taking place. It is undeniable that the use of CCTV has plenty of benefits to offer, especially in reducing crimes and protecting the employees in a premise. Nevertheless, some argue that these cameras invade their privacies due to constantly being monitored. Even so, I strongly believe that CCTV cameras should be installed in every premise to combat the ever increasing theft rate and to protect the workers at the workplace.

Firstly, by having CCTV cameras at workplace, crimes such as robbery can be trimmed down. This is because when a shop is attacked by thieves, the clips taken by these cameras serve as a source of evidence to help the thieves to be traced. To illustrate this further, in Malaysia, policemen used the videos captured by the CCTV cameras to trace and successfully catch a group of robbers who broke into a Seven Eleven shop during the midnight. Not only that, as the employees know that they are under constant surveillance, they will less likely steal from the shops. Thus, it is clear that CCTVs must be put in all workplace so that crime rates can be minimized.

Furthermore, at some offices, employees are often required to handle angry or frustrated customers. At times, face-to-face interactions with an annoyed customer can put the employee in physical danger. Hence, the installation of CCTV cameras may help the employees escape this situation because the customers know very well that their conversations are recorded. In the event of an argument, the videotapes can used to determine what actually took place and further actions can be then taken. In short, these cameras can help to provide some form of protection to the workers against the customers.

Looking from another perspective, the use of CCTV cameras does cause controversy. Those opposing the CCTV systems feel that their privacies are invaded with the constant monitoring of the cameras. However, one must realize that safety is of paramount importance compared to privacy and prevention is always better than suffering from the consequences. Ergo, opponents of this system should try to comprehend the situation and take actions to prevent themselves from being victims of crime.

To conclude, CCTV cameras are essential and therefore must be installed in every premise. This is chiefly to shield oneself from being harmed by any intruders or robbers. Admittedly, privacies are lost with the use of these cameras. Nonetheless, safety should be put first in order to be safe.

EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Jul 2, 2011   #2
Hi Sangeetha, let's fine tune this a little... Use building instead of premises. "Premises" is a confusing word.
...in reducing crimes and protecting the employees in a building .

Nevertheless, some argue that these cameras invade their privacy rivacies by creating a situation in which they are constantly being monitored.

Even so, I strongly believe that CCTV cameras should be installed in every premise to combat the ever increasing theft rate and to protect the workers at the workplace, because_______________ (Give the reason why you think fighting crime is more important than privacy.)

Above, it is not enough to state your opinion. You should give the reason why you opt for one view rather than the other. However, I am just giving you advanced writing instruction. For the IETLS this is great!!!

Hence, the installation of CCTV cameras may help the employees escape this situation because the customers know very well that their conversations are recorded. ---Great example!

Looking from another perspective, the use of CCTV cameras does do cause controversy. Those opposing the CCTV systems feel that their privacies are invaded with the constant monitoring of the cameras. However, one must realize that safety is of paramount importance compared to---Oh, very good job here.

Do not use Ergo, though. It is a stupid word! Ha ha, i don't really mean that. It is just a word people do not often use. it seems like "trying to sound smart."

To conclude, CCTV cameras are essential and therefore must be installed in every building. ---Every building?
OP Geenesh 21 / 29  
Jul 2, 2011   #3
okay thanks kevin.. :)
is there a word limit for ielts? is it okay if i somehow i manage to write an essay of the same length as the one above within the given time limit?
ajit88rai 22 / 188 3  
Jul 3, 2011   #4
Hi Sangeetha,
it seems at last u hav figured out how to form the structure of an essay..?? u have written a very beautiful essay over here...as Kevin has said that the tips he has given is for advanced writing- it is very true... u dont need to change much in this essay...

as far as u hav asked about word limit- in Ielts task 2 has a minimum word limit of 250 words... u can write more, but i wud advise u not 2 write more than 350 words under any circumstances.... thatz the max u shud write if u dont wanna piss off the examiner in the firstplace... moreover just fine tune ur conclusion a lil bit... just use some catchy thought or any thought provoking sentence... rest its a perfect essay for IELTS...

good luck and cheers
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Jul 4, 2011   #5
Maybe you can get it within the limit if you write 3 small paragraphs with 4 sentences in each paragraph. That way, you can give a well-organized essay in 250 words. The paragraphs will be short, though!
ekekek 25 / 51  
Jul 6, 2011   #6
keep pratice more~~Sangeertha~~It's natural to write overtime~~

Don't be nervous~~just calm down and pratice~~


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