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Sep 24, 2020   #1

Table: Average distance in miles traveled per person

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Describe the information in the table and make comparisons where appropriate.

ยป Write at least 150 words.

The table depicts the variation in the usage of different means of transport in England in the years 1985 and 2000. The distance travelled by each type is given in miles.

Overall, mostly the number of various means of transport increased over the period. Whereas some of them such as walking, use of bicycle and local bus decreased. Moreover, cars were most popular among the people while taxis were the least favoured.

In the year 1985, the proportion of people who travelled by car was approximately three-fifth of the total. Nevertheless, the distance travelled by taxis averaged 13 miles only. The rest of the modes accounted for distances less than 500 miles.

In 2000, the distance travelled by most of the means of transport increased. With one-third increase in the use of cars and slightly less than three times increase in the use of local distance buses. However, use of some of them such as walking, bicycle and local bus declined. With almost 50% decrease in the distance travelled by local bus.

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Sep 24, 2020   #2
You are assuming that the reader can see the table in front of them. You have to always remember to phrase the sentences referring to images and data in a manner that assumes the reader cannot confirm the information for themselves. Rather than saying; "The table depicts", you can instead say "An image of a 3 column table was provided. The table was comprised of the following information: A,B, and C. The distance traveled... The idea is to help the reader create a mental picture of what you are reporting. It helps create the accuracy of your report and also, allows the reader to create a manual picture if so desired. That adds to the clarity of your report.

When referring to the data, you have to give the baseline information ( three fifths of what total?) Otherwise the reader will be left with more questions than answers. A situation that will convince the examiner that you have not presented an accurate data report and analysis.

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