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Various cases of people living abroad

Dora Elia Kasih 1 / 1  
May 11, 2017   #1
The chart shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries

life outside the homeland

The bar chart reveals about cases of people have when they migrate to live in other countries. Overall, sorting out healthcare which people aged between 35 to 54 face became the highest problem meanwhile elderly people experienced the lowest problem on finding school for my children.

To begin with, sorting out healthcare of people aged 35-54 remotesa significant increase at approximately 36 percent. Additionally, people aged 18-34 encounters 30% of problem on sorting out finance. Furthermore, both of theseare the greatest problems. On the other hand, finding school for my children is the lowest problem for people aged over 55 or elderly people at approximately 20% and saw an extreme decrease in nearly 3 per cent.

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Irmadesyre 2 / 4  
May 11, 2017   #2
Remotesa : remotesa
Please pay attention with the correct words

Percent - per cent : please be commitment to choose UK or USA style for your writting
itaseptiyani 1 / 2  
May 11, 2017   #3
Attention please your space
Grammar: Children are (no children is)
Attention words plural and singular.

haris_ibrahimm 1 / 1  
May 11, 2017   #4
Let me give your advice, pay attention with the connective word like between. Not between to, but between, and.
Also, be careful on your spelling. Not theseare, the correct one is "these are"

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