Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Writing Task 2, Unit 8D, Page 52
Some people think that the clothes, which is worn by them, is the most essential factors to impress someone else. Others think that it is not true because people cannot judge by what they wear. In my opinion, it depends on the situation that the clothes has its particular function to make others feel admire.
With regards to some people who agree with the notion of the importance of clothes worn, they generally believe that it can make a fresh look or smart one, particularly in a workplace. For instance, according to the result of survey reveals that people, who want to get interview in a company, tend to wear dress smartly with bright shirt, nice tie and formal suit. As a result, their appearance look more diligent and more confident. Therefore, it is necessary to choose clothes carefully for some people in certain occasion.
On the other hand, some society think that others cannot judge someone' appeal through their clothes. It is because not everybody has the same economical issue and affords to buy branded clothes or nice clothing. For example, people who have limited finance only use casual clothes which is affordable, but it does not mean that they are not a smart person. As a result, their dress look cannot describe much information about their mind or behave.
In conclusion, the notion of clothes worn is important to impress other people is true, especially for some people who want to attend formal activity. However, it does not valid for everyone who wear simple dress as their appearance. (260 words)
Hello Asep, I have some suggestions to you
Some people think that the clothes , which is worn ...
... the situation that the clothes has its particular ...
... of the importance of clothes worn, they generally ...
... necessary to choose clothes carefully for some ...
... appeal through their clothes .
... and affords to buy branded clothes or nice clothing.
... the notion of clothes worn is important to ...
You doing repetition too much with clothes. You should change this into FABRIC / GARMENT / SUIT / MENSWEAR AND WOMANSWEAR
Overall is good essay, you can use one idea paragraph correctly and it make your coherence better.
Hi Miss Septi. Here are my suggestions for you.
1. ... clothes, which
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==> the verb should be singular because the subject is the singular one.
2.
Others think that it is not true because people cannot judge by what they wear
==> people cannot be judged by what they wear.
3. that people
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about their mind or behave.
their mind or behaviour
5.
make others feel admire.
"feel" is linking verb and it should be followed by adjective/noun/adverb. you can change the word "admire" to
"admired"I hope it can be useful for you.
Goodluck and Keep Spirited.Hi Septi. here i Have some suggestions for your writing
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