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In my views, there is a positive and negative effects of global tourism in one country


Andhy07 1 / 1  
Mar 15, 2014   #1
Do you agree or disagree that the effects of increased global tourism are more likely to be more harmful than beneficial?

The flow of global tourism has been dramatically increased for the past few years because of the help of media and technologies. I agree, that the increased of tourism of one's country has no beneficiAls effects because it can lead to environmental distraction despite of earning profits in it.

The positive effects of tourism has big impact in one country because of economic growth. It also attract more investors to put more business and facilitate more employment rate especially who live in the province whereas, opportunity is less and not establish compare in the city . For example, they can build establishment like malls and give more people jobs other than agriculture and fishing.

About negative effects of tourism it can lead to environmental distractions. To give illustration in these, like in the zoo and resorts .Although, they can attract more tourist and promotes one places however people can never seen the other side effects in it. It can endanger of natural resources Because of to much using it likewise, mining and killing exotic animals for money. Aside from these example, the increase of prostitution because of influence of other cultures.

In my views, there is a positive and negative effects of global tourism in one country but I think that the government can provide resolution to minimize the employment rate and poverty of their people like developing their natural resources and agricultures.

fanix 3 / 7  
Mar 15, 2014   #2
because of the help of media and technologies
I think this sentence would be correct if you say because of mass madia and technology
fanix 3 / 7  
Mar 15, 2014   #3
and also (increased tourism of one's country has no beneficial effects)
OP Andhy07 1 / 1  
Mar 15, 2014   #4
Hi

What do you think my IELTS score for Gt writing task 2? Thanks
ramshah 11 / 27 5  
Mar 15, 2014   #5
The positive effects of tourism has big impact inon one country
they can attract more tourists
Aside from these examples
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Mar 16, 2014   #6
Hi
What do you think my IELTS score for Gt writing task 2? Thanks

Well, I don't think I am good at that :D
However, you can assess yourself and I am giving the following link in hope that it would help you;
ielts.org/PDF/UOBDs_WritingT2.pdf
Also, I feel you need to worry more about improving your writing than the final score. You need to pay more attention to grammar and clarity of your sentences. For example;

The positive effects of tourism has big impact in one country because of economic growth.

....this is a pretty confusing sentence and grammar is not so great here;
Tourism industry helps a country to boost its economy.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Mar 16, 2014   #7
Well, I don't think I am good at that :D

I am with DUMI.
I also can't even show you definitive band scores. If I do, you will put a great deal of trust on me.
We all here focus on recommending ways how you can improve your writing skills - that is a much more useful way to help you to improve your language ability and therefore, your test results.

If you want to take IELTS exam as early as possible, please pay particular attention to grammar and whole points in the table of IELTS writing descriptors (clicking the link above)
Misnariah Idrus 19 / 35 4  
Mar 16, 2014   #8
(1)
"The flow of global tourism has been dramatically increased for the past few years"

I think, for the past few years should be since the past few years

(2)
"The positive effects of tourism has big impact in .."

Has refers to effects (plural), so it should be have


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