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Vimy Ridge,Day of Deliverance,Constitution Act;3 Defining Moments- Canadian History


alicia15 1 / -  
Jul 27, 2009   #1
Every person must go through events that make them who they are. Every time we fail or do poorly, we learn how to improve ourselves and use those mistakes to help us in the future. On the other side of things, every time we do exceptionally well on something, we use those times to benefit ourselves. Every human must go through these distinguishing moments as they define who they are. Similarly, Canada is a country that has faced many enduring adventures. Our country has faced many challenges but has also had many achievements. The events and actions that make our country extraordinary are the battle of Vimy Ridge, the Day of Deliverance and lastly, the Constitution Act on 1982. These moments and events that took place in Canada's history are what make our country, the strong, independent and amazing place that it is today

Vimy Ridge is a vital part of Canada's history because of the impact that it had on our country's armed forces. The battle showed patriotism and is one of Canada's greatest achievements. During World War One, Canada's army was not very large, with individuals who were not well trained. With a small, weak army, it looked like Canada would not have much success during the war. However, with the Battle of Vimy Ridge, our troops showed the world otherwise. With the German's in control, it seemed like the Allies would never be able to seize the ridge, as the French and British had already failed to do so. That was where Canadian troops stepped in and did the impossible. The Canadian's used new strategies and methods that lead them to conquer the ridge on April 12, 1917. "It was a battle like no other that changed the lives of millions" (Jennings as cited in The Road to Vimy Ridge, 66) However, with a great victory comes great sacrifice. Almost 3 600 Canadians were killed and about 7 000 injured. The over taking of the ridge made all Canadians feel confident and proud, and gave them a new sense of devotion to their country and to their armed forces. That battle was the turning point for Canadians and will be remembered as the battle that made Canada the independent country it is today. With the success of the battle of Vimy Ridge, Canada was starting to be seen as a country as opposed to a colony. The country was given recognition and acknowledgment to show that the lives that were lost and sacrificed were responsible for the remarkable victory. Those that lost loved ones in the battle saw that all those that died, were some of the most important people in Canadian history who were part of something truly outstanding.

The next event in Canada's history that is very important is The Day of Deliverance, or otherwise called Operation Overlord. It is significant because it shows that The United States, Britain, and France think of Canada as an equal, as Canada was given their own beach, Juno Beach, to control. They trusted Canada and its army to make the right choices and win against the Nazis. During the overtaking of the beach, troops were parachuted into enemy territory to overtake the Germans from behind. Lieutenant John Madden was parachuted in and described the happenings of D-Day after he was parachuted and got out safely. He said "As Operation Overlord was very definitely proceeding and the next twenty-four hours would prove the most decisive in the war, no previous military operation has been more carefully planned, more meticulously scripted in the form of timetables and deployments, more intensely trained for, and more methodically launched". This statement is very important because it is the actual opinion of an individual who was directly involved with D- Day. It shows that even though many innocent people were getting killed, the plan still worked and was successful. Lieutenant Madden's words provide evidence that an immense amount of work was put into Operation Overlord and planning this mission properly and effectively was the key to success. The victory proved to countries that Canada's soldiers were very dedicated and resourceful when it came time to pull through and fight the battle. They worked hard and as a team and managed to win over Juno beach. June 6, 1944 was a day that will be remembered in history for years and years to come as the day that Canada proved its liberty.

The third defining moment in Canadian History is the constitution act of 1982. The act was due to the conduct of the Trudeau government, who wanted a country that was right for every class and type of individual. The act was very important because it introduce the Canadian Charter of Rights and Freedoms, which plays a key role in all Canadians lives, to this day. The Charter gives Canadians the right to be their own unique person without being judged or punished. It guarantees the rights and freedoms of citizens in a free and democratic society. Without The Constitution Act and the Canadian Charter of Rights and Freedoms, Canada would be very different then it is today. We would still be living in a world that was very selective and segregated society to the point where there could be another possible war. It happened already due to this very same cause, and so if nobody ever fixed the problem of separation of society, who is to say that it would not happen again. Trudeau once said "Canada will be a strong country when Canadians of all provinces feel at home in all parts of the country, and when they feel that all Canada belongs to them". In this quote he is telling Canadians that all he wants is for everyone to feel that Canada is their one and only home and that they way to achieve this feeling is for everyone to work together and live peacefully with one another. The Constitution Act was only another way of enforcing this through the law. It showed Canadians hat he was truly serious about this and that he would make sure the Charter made a difference in people's lives.

In conclusion, the three defining moments that shaped Canada to be the glorious, magnificent country that it is today are the battle of Vimy Ridge, The Day of Deliverance, and lastly the Constitution Act of 1982. Canada and the ways of our country will constantly be changing. We can not prevent, nor for see the outcomes of these events that will take place. All we can do is work together as a community, country and nation to ensure that Canada stays peaceful and will always be true to our hearts. Because after all this is our home and native land.

If somebody could PLEASE get back to me before 8:00 am tomorrow that would be great! Thanks!

EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Jul 28, 2009   #2
The events and actions that make our country extraordinary are the battle of Vimy Ridge, the Day of Deliverance and lastly, the Constitution Act on 1982.

Why? Preview your reasons in the space freed up by losing all of the rambling I cut from the beginning of your intro.
EF_Simone 2 / 1,986  
Jul 28, 2009   #3
I was going back and forth in my head about that introduction. On the other hand, the analogy is nice. On the other hand, it doesn't add much. What's the purpose of this essay? For what class have you written it?
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Aug 1, 2009   #4
Okay, I suppose the analogy itself isn't so bad. But mostly, the intro consists of general statements that don't need stating.

"Every person must go through events that make them who they are." True, but probably a tautology, or close enough to it as to make stating it pointless.

"Every time we fail or do poorly, we learn how to improve ourselves and use those mistakes to help us in the future." Again, fairly generic statement, and interesting only in that it is probably unjustifiable as a generalization.

"On the other side of things, every time we do exceptionally well on something, we use those times to benefit ourselves." Similar to the last sentence, only without the benefit of having anything to make it interesting.

"Every human must go through these distinguishing moments as they define who they are." A repeat of the first sentence. Stronger sounding, here, because it sets up the analogy, but if it didn't bear mentioning the first time, what justification for repeating it?

"Similarly, Canada is a country that has faced many enduring adventures." This is an analogue to the previous phrase, in that it is equally generic and so uninteresting.

So, I stand by my advice -- cut all of this and start out with the details that actually matter.


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