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TASK 2 IELTS: The violent crime among youngsters since parents and teachers


dina79 20 / 26 3  
Apr 3, 2016   #1
Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers.

To what extend do you agree or disagree with this option?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The youth age tends to joint in criminalization by the new data release in which the statement from a psychologist that this impact becomes by parents and teacher do not take care the children. While, the whole activities kids have a connection in the home and school, but their friends more influence the habit in young people.

There is affair when the children every day school in the morning and come back to home. it is just regularity for studying to finish responsibility without the high concern in their attitude from parents and teacher. A 2014, by wesite Time.com that the kids spending much time in school and home so that they get the convention emotionality and sociality people by parents and teacher. The outcome of this is the children have arogan behaviour and often to come in severity activities.

There is also that the children still have myriad friends from neighbourhood and community. This circumstance shows that they follow the evil of trend from their friends. It is the experience from my friends when he have many friends and start coalesce guns group. The young people execute hardness activities with their group. friend is one of part to affect the regularly emotional yung people.

In conclusion, the children obtain caring about comporment from their teacher and parents when they still in activities at school or home but their friend most of the high make the bad behaviour for children following their activities. In my opinion, I think the children need to selectif for choosing the friend and the parents include teacher more attention for affair the children

Desty22 13 / 20 1  
Apr 3, 2016   #2
HI

The youth age tends to joint in criminalization by the new data release in which the statement from a psychologist that this impact becomes by parents and teacher do not take care the children.

A psychologist released data that the young persons tend to do commit criminal actions as impact of less attention of their parents and teachers.
i think, it is better to write your position in introduction agree or not such as i do believe that..... or i strongly agree
Anaguna 21 / 27 5  
Apr 3, 2016   #3
The youth age tends to joint in criminalization by [...] more influence the habit in young people.
"The last data shows that the youngest under aged 18 are stuck in a criminal case. Many psychologists argue that it is an effect from the careless of their parents. I strongly believe that it is influenced from their peers since they have more time in school ."

Be careful regarding on some words miss.
Wesite =website
Arrogan behavior = behave arrogantly
Neighbourhood = Neighborhood
Yung people = young people
Comporment = comportment
Selectif = selective


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