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Most Violent Crimes Are Wrongly Linked to Mental Illness - Summary article


David54 15 / 22 1  
Sep 14, 2016   #1
Many news talks about person who has mental health problem was responsible to violence. However, the fact that most people with mental illness are never violent. According to the U.S. Department of Health and Human Services (HHS), people with mental disorder are more than 10 times more likely to be victims of violent crimes than general people. On the other hand, researchers from Johns Hopkins Bloomberg School of Public Health also publish an articles about mental illness that were published over two decades, from 1994 to 2014, which states that mental illness and violence toward other people close to 40% said mental illness can increase the risk of violence and only 8% wrote that most people with mental illness are not violent. So these case is still make controversy between the study author and the researcher.
rosadesiana 38 / 40 2  
Sep 14, 2016   #2
hi david,
here are my suggestions
keep writing !

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==> ... School of Public Health also publishpublishedan articles

==> that were published over two decades

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RAY93 35 / 186 136  
Sep 14, 2016   #3
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... of Public Health also publishEDan articles [singular/plural issue ] about mental illness ...

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it is good that you attempted to compose complex structure although you still need to learn how to make it appropriately.

So these caseSisARE still makea controversy between the study author and the researcher.many studies

pay attention in some minor errors particularly grammatical errors


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