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How violent movies impact on young children?


duchuy1809 1 / 2  
Jun 1, 2013   #1
Topic:Do you agree or disagree with the statement: violent movies have negative impacts on young children?

Watching TV is good or bad?

Nowadays, watching TV is a popular mean of entertainment for people including children. There' re various kinds of movies on Tv but children show more interest in violent movies for certain reasons, such as fantastic action scenes or amazing sound effects. However, these movies might have a bad influence on viewers, especially kids. So, I strongly believe that violent movies should be censored due to these following reasons:

First, it wastes lots of time. Because of its amazing affects, violent movies attract plenty of viewers including children. They focus on watching these movies and neglect their school work. Morever, kids are easily to be addited and won't have much time to take care another stuffs such as: eating, sleeping or playing with their parents.

In terms of education, violent movies won't bring back any benefits. Children should learn useful knowledge such as: biology, math or science..., but what they can learn from these kinds of vies are: crime, murder, war...Indeed, these stuffs are suitable for adults only.

Another disadvantage of violent movies is that it will affect children's behavior developement. Because they' re in stage of learning new things so they often imitate what they see on movies. As a result they tend to use violence to solve problems.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Jun 1, 2013   #2
I think your introduction is pretty good. All you need to do in intro is to intoduce your topic to the reader and then stste your opinion. Those features are already there in your intro.

However, you should post this type of messages in Writing Feedback forum. Also, give a meaningful topic in the subject field.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Jun 13, 2013   #3
First, you should type a meaningful topic under the subject field when you open a new thread. It's an important forum rule. Also, you need to provide meaningful feed back to others' threads to have yourself in the active section again.

Nowadays, watching TV is a popular mean of entertainment for people including children.

Nowadays, watching TV is a very popular entertainment mode for everybody including children.

There' re various kinds of movies on Tv but children show more interest in violent movies for certain reasons, such as fantastic action scenes or amazing sound effects.

They show various types of movies on TV that include violent movies too. The children however, are more attracted towards violent movies because they contain scenes of action with sound effects.


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