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IELTS-visitor/host? who should adapt for cultural differences


ajit88rai 22 / 188 3  
Jan 25, 2011   #1
topic-

SOME PEOPLE believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

answer-

Tourism industry has taken a big leap in the last few years. People visit different countries during vacations and also for official purposes. When an individual visits another country, sometimes cultural differences arise between them and the localites. It is said that the visitor must respect the local customs, while others debate that the host country should have some tolerance for cultural differences. However, its the moral duty of a visitor to change themselves according to the territory and culture they are visiting.

Host country most of the times welcome their guests with a big smile. Sometimes a foreign national might not be acquainted with the local customs and can make mistakes. When a host country welcomes any guest, they should also have the guts to forgive unintentional mistakes. For example, a lot of tourists come to visit the Golden Temple (India). It is a custom to cover the head inside the premises. If by chance, a foreigner doesn't covers his/her's , the local people should not feel offended and instead, should tell that foreigner the importance of covering the head. A host should show the required hospitality and enlighten the visitors about their customs and traditions.

However, the responsibility of the visitors should be greater than that of the host. When visitors go in foreign countries, they should adapt themselves according to the needs. They should be prepared , beforehand, not to hurt the sentiments of the locals. A country welcomes guests to promote cultural exchange, not to be insulted or having their culture polluted. When a visitor is visiting a country, they should read about the customs, traditions and other rules of that country and be prepared . For instance, some tourists go to western countries and throw their garbage anywhere on the streets or spit anywhere. This kind of behaviour is unacceptable. A visitor has no right to break the rules of a host country.

Unfortunately, the cultural differences result in clashes sometimes. It is the responsibility of both, hosts and visitors, to adapt themselves. However, a host might not be aware of the origin of the visitors. On the other hand, when a visitor can do the effort to go abroad, they should also do a little effort to learn about the region they are going. Nowadays, all the information is available on the internet. If a visitor is confused, they should humbly ask for guidance from the locals and should not behave rudely, which would hurt anyone.

Thus, I strongly believe that its the duty of a visitor to camouflage with the region. A host can tolerate minor mistakes, but intentional, disrespecting behaviours isn't acceptable.Tourism is to promote cultures and make others aware of the integrity and tradition of one's own country, not to get their cultures and sentiments , insulted and spoiled. Visitors must respect the cultures and behaviour of the host country.
sabrinayaa 12 / 22  
Jan 25, 2011   #2
ajit88rai
Hi,
I have something confused with your essay , maybe it's my grammar problem

However, its the moral duty of a visitor to change themselves according to the territory and culture they are visiting.
its = it's ?
you said a visitor ,but then you use themselves and they later .
Do you understand what I want to express ?

When a host country welcomes any guest, they should also have the guts to forgive unintentional mistakes
It's also the same problem .you use they to match with a host country .

That's always my weakness ,too ~

I would appreciate if you can help me ~

Your essay it's wonderful at least what I think . Logically and has few mistakes ~

:)
OP ajit88rai 22 / 188 3  
Jan 25, 2011   #3
my dear friend, them and themself is different. I have consulted this essay with a university professor from USA..he didn't mention that problem.In fact he said I used three or four wrong words which I should have avoided. I don't know how can I help you, but I would be glad if I am able to help you in any way...all the best and cheers.
renga78 6 / 18  
Jan 25, 2011   #4
Hi,

The essay looks good.

My humble suggestion is, instead of repeatedly starting a sentence like "when visitors go in", "when a a visitor is visiting" etc you can say like "Foreigners while visting foreign countries" / "Visitors while visiting"... It is polite way of conveying what would you like to say.

I hope my suggestion would be useful.

Regards,
Raj
OP ajit88rai 22 / 188 3  
Jan 25, 2011   #5
Hi,
thanks Raj, your suggestion is really nice.I will try it from next time. Keep giving ur advices.

Ajit.
sabrinayaa 12 / 22  
Jan 26, 2011   #6
hi
I think what I need is a grammar book! I hope I can improve it as soon as I can!

:)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Feb 15, 2011   #7
Do not use debate this way:
while others debate argue that ...---Actually, it is probably not incorrect, but I want to tell you that "debate" usually is used like this:

People often debate the question of whether culture is a good thing or a bad thing.

A country welcomes guests to promote cultural exchange, not to be insulted or having their culture polluted. ---Oh, very good sentence here. Your argument reflects real understanding.

A host can tolerate minor mistakes, but intentional, disrespecting behaviours isn aren't acceptable.--You have a very good way of writing. I am just making a small correction here.
OP ajit88rai 22 / 188 3  
Feb 16, 2011   #8
Hey thanks Kevin, I gave my Ielts exam on 12th Feb. I think i did well with some stupid mistakes...so lets see how much i can get in that... Besides, I wish to post the essay question n ideas i wrote in the exam...i will do that asap...do review that thread n give me ur expert opinion..i had emailed that essay to an english professor in USA and he told me that i shud get 6.5-7 in that essay..so lets hope so...
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Feb 23, 2011   #9
Thanks Ajit, and I need your advice, too. Please tell us about the test and about what you wrote and what points were deducted for. I often am asked for advice, but I have never taken the test! So... if you have time, please START A THREAD sometime about this experience.
OP ajit88rai 22 / 188 3  
Feb 24, 2011   #10
Hi Kevin,
actually i did write a thread about what i wrote...but i dont know why/how, it was removed...will post it again asap. thankx


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