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vocational training:essays for those in their secondary school and high school finals


elfranchise 1 / -  
Sep 14, 2010   #1
vocational training is the answer to unemployment among the youths:
Unemployment is the commonest problem among the graduates and other youths of today. A versatile number of graduates are being produced every year irrespective of the scarcity of jobs. The incumbent workers kept swearing affidavit reducing their normal age so as to remain in the office not caring about the virtuous graduates in the society. This has been treatening our economy and the well being of the country.

Introduction of vocational training institutions am sure is the answer to the menace of unemployment amongst the youths of today. One may ask what is a vocational institution or training? This simply means education or teaching in a given career or occupation. ie teaching someone a particular occupation.

ryin2010 2 / 2  
Sep 14, 2010   #2
vocational training is the answer to unemployment among the youths:
Unemployment is a common problem amongst high school graduates and other youths of today* . A versatilevast number of graduates* are being produced every year irrespective of the scarcity of jobs. The incumbent workers kept swearing affidavit reducing their normal age so as to remain in the office not caring about the virtuous graduates in the society.** This has been treatening our economy and the well being of the country.

Enrolling into vocational training institutions is one possible cure to this unemployment problem. One may ask what is a vocational institution or training? *** Vocational training institutions are institutions where students have the option to choice a specific career field and an enable to specialize it. For example, Culinary Arts, students who decide to study Culinary Arts are given proper foundation to be Chefs, Line Cooks, and other skills needed to work in a restaurant.

* Be specific with who are the graduates. if you are talking about high school graduates, then put high school graduates. If you are talking about college graduates or post secondary school graduates, then put college graduates or post secondary school graduates.

** This sentence is very vague and confuses the reader of what's the purpose of the sentence. Rephrase it so readers can understand what's the point and make it more concise.

*** Don't prose a question during an essay.

- I would suggest adding more detail to this, for example, in the first paragraph, you can add some statistics to support your claim. In the second paragraph you can add some details of what a vocational training institutions are and why are they recommended.

Oh, I went to a Vocational High School so I can totally relate to what's being mentioned in this essay.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Sep 16, 2010   #3
This is the wrong way to use versatile:
A versatile number of graduates are being
Do this:
versatile Countless graduates are being ...

RYIN solved all of your problems, I think! Do you have any questions about the corrections?

Look at this, too:
I am sure the introduction of vocational training institutions is the answer to the menace of unemployment among the youths of today.

:-)


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