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IELTS 1: How much waste was collected by a recycling centre over a period of 5 consecutive years


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Nov 16, 2021   #1

waste collection by a recycling centre from 2011 to 2015



A glance at the chart provided reveals how much waste was collected by a recycling centre over a period of 5 consecutive years between 2011 and 2015

Overall , It is evident that the total amount of waste collected only fluctuated slightly throughout the period . Furthermore , paper was the most collected type of recyclable waste , the opposite was true for garden waste .

In 2011 , the figure for paper waste was approximately under 60 tons , whereas the garden waste was just over 32 tons . Meanwhile , there was about 48 tons of glass was gathered which was higher roughly 13 tons in comparison with the amount of tins waste .

The period from 2011 to 2013 witnessed a moderate decline in the amount of paper wasted which made this figure hit the lowest point of 40 tons , then rising rapidly to 70 tons in the year 2015 . During the same time , the figure of other waste fluctuated marginal , then stood at over 50 tons of glass , approximately 40 tons of tins and 35 tons of garden waste .



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Nov 17, 2021   #2
The presentation is mostly acceptable except, the writer did not proofread the report. There is a missing period at the end of one paragraph. This created an open ended and confusing summary to the reader, who is expecting more information since the end signal for the sentence/ paragraph is not there.

There should not be a space between the last word and punctuation mack in the sentences either. This is a simple formatting problem that you should have learned about when writing school reports and essays.

Being a newbie, you show the potential to pass this task with a high scare. You need proper guidance to achieve that. More practice essays with proper corrections can help you achieve that.


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