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Watching movies in a theater is more fun than watching them at home.


csv8674xn 2 / 1  
Jul 26, 2011   #1
Nowadays, seeing movies has become a major entertainment in our daliy life, which leads to the question "How to obtain more fun from seeing movies? " In my point of view, seeing movie in the theater please me the most. That is because movie in the theater is usually the newest and theaters always provide the best sound effects compared to those in the house.

Usually, DVDs of movies are released after movies in the theater did. We can ,therefore, see those movies earlier than those who watching at home. Moreover, seeing movies in the theater gives me the hottest topic when I talk to my friends. By contrast, I may not follow the conversations between my friends, while they talking about the newest films.

Also, the sound effect in the theater is always much better than those in your house. Take my devices for example. They are not equipped with top technology. In fact I bought it couple years ago, all of which are too old to use from todays perspetive. However, updating the devices cost so much. Because of money, We cannot always keep the device such as amplifier, to be the newest. On the other hand, by spending few dollars in the theater, I can have a enjoyable afternoon time.

Clearly, seeing movies in the theater brings more convenience. Not only can you obtain newest information about films, but also keep you apart from being no idea about what your friend talking about when they are having a conversation about new movies. Last not least, It's cheap. Every one can enjoy the best sound effect by little cost instead of spending lots of money on the device in your house.

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A topic in TOEFL iBT. Thanks for your help!

linh202 11 / 23  
Jul 28, 2011   #2
Nowadays, seeing movies has become a major entertainment in our daliy life, which leads to the question "How to obtain more fun from seeing movies? " InFrom my point of view, seeing movie in the theater please me the most. That is because movie in the theater is usually the newest and theaters always provide the best sound effects compared to those in the house.

However, updating the devices cost sotoo much. Because of money, We cannot always keep the device such as amplifier, to be the newest. On the other hand, by spending few dollars in the theater, I can have aan enjoyable afternoon time.

Last but not least, It's cheap. Every one can enjoy the best sound effect by little cost instead of spending lots of money on the device in your house.

Your wording is easy to understand. I really like it. But I think you should add more details to your essay and use some synonyms to make it more impressive.
aleafsun 9 / 19  
Jul 28, 2011   #3
csv8674xn,

In my point of view, seeing movie in the theater please me the most. That is because movie in the theater (movies in theaters )is usually the newest and theaters always provide the best sound effects compared to those in the housein houses .

Whenever we use "the", we point out a "specific" noun; in the contrast, when we use "a/an", we refer to a non-specific noun. As a result, I won't recommend you to use "the" here.

Aleaf
Xray1305 1 / 3  
Jul 28, 2011   #4
The subject that you wrote about is interesting, but common.
You have some grammar difiiculties here and there.
Next time find a subject that is a bit more difficult or complicated to progress.
Neil zhang 3 / 7  
Jul 29, 2011   #5
IMO, there are some advice

i have ever taken toefl test training class in China, my teacher told my that"never make your treatise too thin"
what about add more detials and examples in the 2 and 3 para,

also

try to use paraphrase, and try more complicate words ! that is TOEFL OG's demand


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