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Water cycle - there are three main processes: evaporation, rain, and water running back to the sea.


ibe13 36 / 50 9  
Nov 21, 2016   #1
The illustration depicts the natural process of water cycle. Overall, it is noticeable that there are three main processes in this diagram; evaporation, rain, and water running back to the sea.

To begin with, owing to the sun's heat, evaporation process occurs from two main places; the sea which stores water, and lakes and rivers. In addition, transpiration from plants and trees also happens because of heat of the sun. After that, the result of evaporation and transpiration becomes invisible water vapor which is brought by wind. The higher wind carries out, the cooler vapor is, then cloud being formed. The next stage is when rain falls because clouds are much cooler.

Turning to the next stage, water from rain, then, flows on the river and some passes into the porous rock being ground water which flows into lakes, rivers, and seas. Afterwards water from river flows into the sea.


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RAY93 35 / 186 136  
Nov 22, 2016   #2
by reading your essay, it is evident that you have such an enhanced skill on writing as you deliver an essay that free from major errors and only presented very few minor errors. it has emphasized that you have a good control in accuracy. However, I can conclude that you still have a problem on writing at ideal length on a given time, around 20 minutes. we know that you should write at least 150 words there while your essay is exactly composed of 150 words which is too risky. you need to practice to write fast either think fast of what you would deliver on your essay.

if you have a problem on the length of your writing, on this case too short, you may write too efficient or just simply do not covers all the main/interesting facts and ideas of the question/diagram.

here some alternatives to lengthen your summary:

evaporation process occurs from two main places; the sea which stores water, and lakes and rivers. In addition, transpiration from plants and trees also happens

you may need to mention where the plant and trees grow as the third site of evaporation process

The next stage is when rain falls because clouds are much cooler.

where the rain usually falls down?particularly shown by the diagram

Afterwards water from river flows into the sea.

need to mention that all those water flows are naturally accumulated/stored in the sea

GOOD LUCK FOR YOUR NEXT WRITING


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