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Ways to spend less money - essay


lwshing 2 / 4  
Feb 1, 2011   #1
Taman Pelangi,
53200 Johor Bahru.

Jay:
I have been long time does not communicate with you but i glad to hear you have fine at your country.Last week, you write a letter about you have stretch yours ringgit as prices of goods have gone up.Luckily, I have attended a save your ringgit session run by the State Consumer Department yesterday, this programme have teaches me many ways to spend less and save money each month.

First and foremost, you should downsizing spending in every month....

Sincerely,

________
(XXX)

Please help correct this essay and replace it with a better words...Thanks

sabLeya 3 / 14  
Feb 1, 2011   #2
Your entire essay is full of grammatical mistakes. The entire essay needs to be corrected. I wish I could do that...But I have too little time in my hand...so I did only the first paragraph for you....I'll do the rest may be when I get time.

It has been a long time since I last communicated with you, but I am glad to know that you are doing good at home.You wrote a letter last week mentioning about the increased price of goods and the falling value of the ringgit. I was fortunate enough to attend "save your ringgit session" run by the State Consumer Department yesterday. This programme taught me ways in which to spend less money and save more.
OP lwshing 2 / 4  
Feb 1, 2011   #3
can help me correct whole essay?
I want learn from mistake.
sabLeya 3 / 14  
Feb 1, 2011   #4
It was very dificult for me to understand what you were trying to say, well I made the changes in 15 minutes....check out from he second para...

First and foremost, you should cut down on your spending every month. Spending uncontrollably will cease you from saving and will give you a tougher time when you are in needed of emergency. You should learn to adjust your lifestyle try to achieve a better one.

I have also learnt that people especially, teenagers should not get caught up with advertisements in television, newspapers, posters. It has also advised people not to center their attention at the new arrivals in the market like handbag, clothes, shoes etc. Therefore, we should strive to come out of our addictive shopping nature because as goods bought in an addictive state does not assure quality. We should focus on the quality of the goods, not on the price as high quality goods guarantees to last long.

When you visit the shopping center, you should first make a list of the goods you want to buy. You must be very careful to mention only the specific items in the list and care must be taken not to put useless items into the shopping list. Plan carefully and stick to it. Do not buy the thing that does not exist in your list. Most importantly, do not go to the shopping centre without any idea of what you want to buy.

Shopping should be a part of healthy lifestyle. You should cut down all junk foods and drinks like Cocacola, Pepsi to name a few. Drink water instead of soft drinks, as it is healthier than any other drinks I the world. Although you love junk food so much, think about your health before jumping on the buy.

Last but not the least, following this few ways will save you RM100 or RM150 each month. I think this might be of profound benefit to you...

hope this helps...
OP lwshing 2 / 4  
Feb 1, 2011   #5
In which paragraph you doesn't understand?
Anyway you helps me a lot
EF_Susan - / 2,365 12  
Feb 7, 2011   #6
It was very dificult for me to understand what you were trying to say, well I made the changes in 15 minutes...

Thanks Namia, you are great!

Okay Edward, now if you want to practice, you should type the essay the way Namia typed it. You can add some more sentences, too, and we will look to see where you still have errors. Do you have any questions so far?

...that you are doing good well at home.You wrote a letter last week mentioning about the increased price of goods and the falling value of the ringgit. I was fortunate enough to attend "Save your Ringgit Ses sion" run by the State Consumer Department yesterday.

:-)


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