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IELTS-Wealthy nations should share wealth among poorer? Yes, but in a feasible manner


Basha101 1 / -  
Jan 22, 2013   #1
Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer
nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the
responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their
citizens themselves?
You should write at least 250 words.
Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples
and with relevant evidence.


The world around us is not the one we are always dreaming of. It is devided between rich countries and poor ones. There is always an argument about whether wealthy nations should share their wealth among poorer nations.

The answer is yes but, in a very feasible and controlled way. Wealthy countries are usually rich in sources, money, production and technology and they have a lot to share.

How will wealthy nations share their wealth? In my opinion, they should share with education, which is the most important factor in developing nations. Poor countries cannot just remain poor waiting for aids but instead development plans should be created by their own governments with the help and education of wealthier countries.

In addition, the continuity of education aid and modern technology sharing should be always connected with real development on the ground but, should not be conditional with political interests.

Food and other resources must be shared in some conditions; firstly in case of transitional period for the poor nation after which they will move to the next level in their development. Another situation if they are affected by natural disasters or wars.

Unlimited and everlasting wealth sharing is not acceptable as it is not healthy for poor nations. This will create even poorer and dependant nations in the future.

Rasheed101 1 / 3 1  
Jan 22, 2013   #2
"How will wealthy nations share their wealth"
Better to say: " How the wealth will be shared by wealthy nation"? passive form is better as wealth is the core of this paragraph
dumi 1 / 6,930 1592  
Jan 22, 2013   #3
The world around us is not the one we are always dreaming of. It is devided between rich countries and poor ones. There is always an argument about whether wealthy nations should share their wealth among poorer nations.

This is pretty good, but it is even better if you state your opinion in the introduction itself. That would help your examiner to follow you in your desired direction.

The answer is yes but, in a very feasible and controlled way.

.... Ok.... your opinion has come in the first body para... Take this to the introduction and start with the first reason why you say "it is a conditional yes" :D .... Then support this reason with an example :)


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