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Essay about "My weekend".


Barbiah 1 / -  
Apr 3, 2010   #1
Hi ..

I was asked to write an essay about my weekend and it has to be between (100-200) words. I would appreciate it if any one review my draft essay and give me a comment.

Thank you.

In the weekends, some people go to visit their relatives or shopping or even go to trips, but some people don't do anything. This weekend was different from any other weekend, because my family decided to go for a trip to the mountains and spend our day there.

Firstly, we prepared what we needed from food and drinks. Because it was in winter, we took our umbrellas and jackets. After that, we get dressed and went to the mountain. When we arrived to our small house in the mountain we put our things in the house and my mother started to unpack the food and cook the meal. My sisters helped my mother while my brothers helped my father with collecting wood. On the other hand, me and my little brother and sister went for an adventure to explore the place and I took my camera with me to take photos for the mountains. When we finished our adventure my mother finished cooking and we gathered together to eat our meal and we played many games after that.

This weekend was exiting for our family and we enjoyed it and hope I can go there again.


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EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Apr 4, 2010   #2
In On the weekends, some people go to visit their relatives or shopping or even go to on trips, but some other people don't do anything. This weekend was different from any other ...

Firstly, we prepared the food and drinks we needed. Because it was in winter, we took our umbrellas and jackets. After that, we got dressed and went to the mountain. When we arrived to at our small house ...

On the other hand, my little brother, my sister, and I went for ...

This weekend was exiting for our family, and we enjoyed it. I hope I can go there again.
Vakax 2 / 50  
Apr 5, 2010   #3
Inspired In the On weekends, some people go to visit their relatives or go shopping or even go to go on trips, but some people . Others - don't do anything. This weekend was different from any other weekends, because my family decided to go for on take a trip to the mountains and spend our day there to enjoy quality time with eachother.

Firstly, we prepared what we needed from food and drinks. Because it was in winter, we took our umbrellas and jackets. After that, we get got dressed and went to the mountain(Make it more personal..At the moment it seems like a skeleton everyone can build on. What you could do is write something like..." On our way to our destination, we sang songs to pass the time, etc") .

When we arrived to at our small house in the mountain,we put our things in the house and my mother started to unpack the food and inorder to cook. My sisters helped my mother cook while my brothers helped my father with collecting wood. we unpacked our stuff and set about to work. My brothers went with my dad to gather firewood as my sisters helped my mother cook. On the other hand, me and my little brother and sister went for an adventure to explore the place and I took my camera with me to take photos for the mountains. Meanwhile, me, my younger brother and sister went on an adventure to explore the area.(Kids often give names to these little adventures usually related to various movies or cartoons. We did atleast.) I had my camera with me and i took a lot of photographs of the mountains and plant life.When we finished our adventure my mother finished cooking and we gathered together to eat our meal and we played many games after that. When we came back from our little adventure, My mum had finished cooking, so we sat down together to enjoy a delicious meal. Afterwards, we played games together and so ended our weekend on a highnote.

This weekend was exiting for our family and we enjoyed it and hope I can go there again.

If i were to write this essay i would also mention family values, how the experience helped us in coming together as a family because on a day to day basis, life IS becoming real hectic that the only time to enjoy with eachother is on weekends.

~You are only limited by your imagination~


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