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Well-being of pets (Quest in IELTS)


jomse 5 / 13  
Feb 9, 2011   #1
1st IELTS score 7.5, 2nd IELTS score 5.5 please help me.

Quest in IELTS: Many keep pets in their home; however they do not take care of the well being of the pet animals. How can you keep the pets while attending their well being also. Discuss?

From time immemorial human beings trained animals and kept as pets for hunting, as messenger, security, for transportation and in order to get rescued. Dominent pet animals are Dogs, Cats, Horses, Birds, Horses, fishes etc. Often these animals are under captivity and are unattended therefore leading to an unconscious cruelty towards the animals.

Lack of technical knowledge about the animals habitat will leads the animal's life in a terrible risk. Particularly exotic animals of a different habitat required food of their own habitat. Lack of knowledge about their habitat will lead the animal into its slaughter house. Thought animals can be trained in the long run initially they have to be well treated.

Nowadays fish tanks are decorative items in most of the visiting rooms. Sometimes these fish tanks are becoming death chambers. Feeding habits, pH value, temperature, salinity are some of the remarkable reasons behind it.

Fishes are categorised as lower lying and upper lying fishes based on their movement in water. If the feeding has done only in the upper areas of the fish tank the lower lying fishes won't survive for long. PH value determines the acid alkali ratio of the water. Acid and alkali concentration also has to be taken into account and should be maintained. Temperature and salinity also plays a major role in the survival of fishes.

If properly attended pets will show its loyalty, gratitude and reciprocation towards their master. The lethargic attitude that human beings show towards their pets always threatens the animal's life. Vetenary doctors and trainers are guides to take care of the pets. Internet also provides vital information regarding the exotic breeds of animals and their habitats.
tleuliyeva 3 / 5  
Feb 9, 2011   #2
Hello Jojo!
I think that this essay is not organized, it seems you didn't concentrate on your question and ideas.

From time immemorial human beings trained animals and kept as pets for hunting, as messenger, security, for transportation and in order to get rescued. This sentance is not very good, try to make it better. Dominent pet animals are Dogs, Cats, Horses, Birds, Horses , fishes etc. (no need to write these types with a capital letter).

Better, first, concentrate on your question and organize your ideas clearly (even if you spend 5-10 minutes on organizing your ideas, this time will never be wasted). Your ideas have to be linked. In your conclusion you gave some methods how to solve the problem, but you shouldn't write them in your conclusion (as they are solutions and should be in the body of the essay).
OP jomse 5 / 13  
Feb 9, 2011   #3
Thank you verymuch Tleuliyeva... i will look into it.
EF_Susan - / 2,364 12  
Feb 16, 2011   #4
You need THEM.
... trained animals and kept them as...

Do not capitalize there words: ... are Dogs, Cats, Horses, Birds, Horses, fishes, etc.

animal into its a slaughter house.

Thought Though animals can be trained in the long run initially they have to be well treated.

Ha ha, this is a good word!---> death chambers.

I want to show you how to pluralize this. Look at how the apostrophe goes at the end of the word:
The lethargic attitude that human beings show towards their pets always threatens the animals' lives.

:-) Nice, I like the way you think!


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