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The West Park Secondary School after the first construction in 1950 and development in 2010


sunaaa 1 / 1  
May 30, 2020   #1

Analysis of the maps essay



The three given maps illustrate the changes of West Park Secondary School's construction during the period since 1950, through 1980 to 2010.

Overall, there is a range of kinds of facilities having been done around the school. Sports field, car park and science block were highlights.

According to the first construction in 1950, the space was divided into 4 main parts: school and playground which were located near a farmland and a row of houses. After 30 years, it was seen a new car park and science block built as the replacement of the old houses. The previous farmland was reconstructed into sport field, so that students could try various sports here.

In 2010, there was no change in the science block and the school main building. However, the extent of playround and sport field was narrowed as the result of the car park area's expansion. The sport fields was even reduced by about 3 times. Although adults found it easier to park, students would feel uncomfortable in practising and playing in a small space.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,767 4770  
May 30, 2020   #2
I need the image uploaded to serve as a reference when reviewing the content of your report. I cannot offer a comprehensive review when you do not include the image. Please remember to upload the image next time. Students are not allowed to upload the image for the OP. Here goes my grammar review for your work instead.

Kindly be mindful of your spelling. Your LR score depends upon it. You misspelled playground as playround. You should also do a review of your singular - plural rules. There is an error in relation to that grammar instruction in the following:

The sports field was even reduced... - ... field were even...
The previous farmland... - The earlier farmland...

I cannot double check your essay for information accuracy since the image is not included. Kindly remember to include it next time so that I will have a better idea of the discussion instructions and have a comparative point for your information presentation. Thanks.
OP sunaaa 1 / 1  
May 31, 2020   #3
@Holt
Thank you so much for the feedback. This is the first time I use this forum so that I don't know much about how to use it. I will try to find the way to upload photos so that you can check it more easily.

Thank you so much @Holt


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