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White Gulls Dependent On Ice Are Disappearing From The Arctic


andika08 81 / 80 16  
Sep 15, 2016   #1
Life in the world is not just humans there are also are animals. For example, there is animal like white seagull. They lived in the Arctic. They seem to start disappearing from the seas around Greenland.

Based on a data from Claude Joiris of the Royal Belgian Institute for Natural Sciences in Brussels that he collected in a trip icebreaker between Greenland and Svalbard between 1988 and 2014. White gull populations has decreasing six times every year before especially in 2007. It was because of changing the environment and also caused by migration of them to discovered food sources.

Factors affecting the birds can survived like many source of foods which are fish in the sea must be avaiable. They are very sensitive about changed and depended on sea ice.

The good impact of the persistence of these birds them into the ecosystem balanced.

However others impacts will be extincted and can not founded these animals in an environmental like usual. The last was kept the environment better so that they can still be there at their habitat.
rizaldohabibie 19 / 35  
Sep 15, 2016   #2
your essay is quite good with easy understandable structures. I have some suggestions for you in order to enhance it.

gull populationshas decreasing six times
>> the noun phrase of populations is plural so it should be followed by have and the verb decreasing should be past participle [decreased]

Factors affecting the birds can survived [survive]
>> pay attention to the modal which ...

I hope it will encourage your next essays, thank you.
David54 15 / 22 1  
Sep 15, 2016   #3
Hallo Andika,

There are several correction for you,
..there are also rare animals also .
...Based on a data from Claude Joiris of from the Royal Belgian ...
... six times every year,before especially in 2007. It was because of changing the environment changing ......
... must be avail able...
However, others impacts...
Yonathan 46 / 65 5  
Sep 15, 2016   #4
Hi Andika
Let me give you some advice...

Life in the world is not(isnt) just humans (but) there are also are animals.

The good impact of the persistence of these birds them ... ==> (What does it mean?)
However others(other) impacts will be extincted and ...

Thank you...


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