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IELTS Task 1 - A Wind Turbine for Harnessing Renewable Energy


midorimido 2 / 7  
Feb 4, 2015   #1
The diagrams below show the design for a wind turbine and its location.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons were relevant.


The diagrams show the construction of wind turbine and where it can be placed. The turbine consists of blades, wind sensor which is used to manage speed and direction, and generator. The process starts when a wind blows through the blades. As a result, the blade is turned around by wind. As the air is turning the blade, the wind sensor will recognize speed and direction which is connected to a generate. When the wind is sensoring speed and direction, it will inform computer operator about direction and angle of blades.

The tower can be placed on the hill, and in this case the tower can be installed under the sea. However, wind turbine tends to be lower and less wind strengths only 100 kilowatts, so landcapeis not spoilled. Alternatively, the tower can be placed on the hill where the wind aremaximum strength and more electricity can be generated. In general, while the wind turbine appears to be a simple way of harnessing renewable energy, its instalation may cause a number problems related to its location.




ayulia 3 / 8 1  
Feb 4, 2015   #2
hi midorimido,

let me try to correct your writing

which is connected to a generate.

be careful with verb and noun

so landcapeis not spoilled

be careful with misspelling

where the wind aremaximum strength and

it is better to replace with where the wind build up a maximum strength and
always try to double check about articles in your writing..

keep writing adiks :)
talibaquil 2 / 3  
Feb 4, 2015   #3
The process starts when a wind blows through the blades. As a result, the blade is turned aroundstart rotating by wind. As the air is turningrotating the blade, the wind sensor will recognize speed and direction which is connected to a generate.generator

good luck
replikatika 4 / 5 1  
Feb 4, 2015   #4
Dear midori,
In general, I found it is a pretty good essay. I can just point out small slips;

The turbine consists of blades, wind sensor which is used to manage speed and direction, and generator.

I think you forgot to mention 'steel tower' here.

However, wind turbine tends to be lower and less wind strengths only 100 kilowatts, so landscape not spoilled.

I reckon '100 kilowatts' is not for strengths of the wind but for the electricity which is generated by the wind turbine.
tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Feb 5, 2015   #5
The first diagram illustrates the construction of a wind turbine which consists of 4 crucial components, while the second picture describes how the wind turbines work in the optimum locations. It is noticeable that the blades are the most important part of the wind turbine. Computer, the advanced technology which is control the speed and direction of the wind. In sharp contrast to this, the strategic locations determine the output of electricity. More higher the wind turbine is placed, more bigger the electricity is produced.

Here you have to select data, groping the data based on similarity or differences. if I were you, I will explain the first picture in the first body paragraph and second picture in the second body paragraph. It can make your writing is impressive in term of the logical structure.
OP midorimido 2 / 7  
Feb 5, 2015   #6
could you please to tell me more detail about "more" function?
akhfan 5 / 9 3  
Feb 6, 2015   #7
it will be better if you write the first sentence as the main idea.

Ex: The tower of wind turbine has two possibilities in setting up. It can be placed on the hill, and It also can be installed under the sea. ...
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Feb 7, 2015   #8
Halo, Kawan :D wishing this helps :D

The tower can be placed on the hill, and in this case the tower can be installed under the sea. (Increase your clarity. As a reader, I imagine a turbine is fully under water) However, wind turbine tends to be lower and less (overuse, choose one as this sense similar) wind strengths only 100 kilowatts, so lands cape (space) is not spoilled (misspelling) . Alternatively, the tower can be placed on the hill where the wind are (space) maximum strength and more electricity can be generated. In general, while the wind turbine appears to be a simple way of harnessing renewable energy, its instalation (misspelling) may cause a number problems related to its location.

As per the second diagram, the turbine can be placed in particular places in purpose to catch the wind. The optimum location is the peak of a hill where the wind blows of its optimum speed while constructing wind turbine in inshore coastal area would be second consideration. However, domestic turbine can be harnessed to generate 100 kilowatt electric power, and it would be sufficient for domestic electricity consumption based on alternative energy source.


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