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IELTS TASK1 a wind turbine used to generate electricity


ilankelo21 36 / 41 22  
Jan 25, 2016   #1
The diagram shows a layout on how a wind turbine used to generate electricity and two possible spots where turbine can be installed.

According to the data, there are several parts required to construct a wind turbine. Steel power must be the main component of wind turbine construction as its function to support other important devices and it is established vertically. Another one is a wind sensor which exactly is put above the steel tower. With control of computer in the small building under the turbine, this functions to manage the speed and direction of the blades. To produce electricity, blades made of fiberglass or wood is installed in the front of part of the wind sensor. When winds blows, the blades will work and produce heat which will be converted by a generator inside the wind sensor to be electricity up to 1.5 megawatts.

There are two proper places to build a wind turbine. Shoreline is usually the appropriate area since the wind rapidity resulted is high. However, in the evening, it seems that it cannot work in the maximum due to the fact that the air blowing from the continent is hinder by the high hill. To cope with this problem, another wind turbine is placed on the hill, so that the power produced is satisfied. Then it is generated to be electricity up to 100 kilowatts in domestic turbine.




Mardy17 32 / 18 5  
Jan 25, 2016   #2
Hi IlanKelo21, I guess your description really clear.
However, I find several correction.

... to generate electricity and two possible spots (BASED ON PICTURE, THERE ARE 3 POSSIBLE PLACES, YOU HAVE TO CONSIDER THE TURBIN INSTALLATION ON DOMESTICS RESIDENTIAL ) where turbine can be installed.

Furthermore, I also highlight the missing article in your writing...

... With control of THE computer in the small building ... When winds blows , the blades will work

... THE Shoreline is usually the appropriate area ... to be electricity up to 100 kilowatts in THE domestic turbine.[/quote]
vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Jan 25, 2016   #3
Muhammad, if the first sentence in this essay is your opening statement that you have not followed the proper requirement for the introduction. The introduction should be at least 3 sentences long and indicates a summary of the report content, plus and additional important data, such as keywords, and the like, which need to be introduced early on to the reader. I do not believe that your essay follows that distinct requirement for an IELTS task 1 essay.


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