I am trying to improve my writing skill. Can you give me some advices?
... Well, I think you already have good writing skills.... It's a matter of keep on improving if you need to master a language. You follow the right essay structure for this task.
When children go to kindergarten they will achieve a new education without their family. Teachers will prepare them for not only knowledge but also essential skills in the school. According to the scientists, children are really go-ahead and like discovering at this age, so school is an immaculate environment for developing physical and mental of young children . Moreover, children also have exigency opening relationships then their communication abilities are advanced.
...Here you need to support your argument, rather the reason, with an example of more specific nature. It's a requirement for this task.
Write more essays and post them here. Also, practice writing with time as you have limited time for this task.