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"wisdom of the former times"; GRE issue essay/ Important truths begin as outrageous

kgb66 4 / 12  
Sep 6, 2010   #1
Important truths begin as outrageous, or at least uncomfortable, attacks upon the accepted wisdom of the time."

History has shown that changes in society not only come slowly, but are met with some degree of opposition. This is not always the case however, for example, it was in the not so distant past that the statement "a woman's place is in the home" was an accepted wisdom. Yet, today women take up their place in society at many levels; the home, working in the service sector, running major corporations, and also at the higher levels of government.

Opposition to women moving into the workforce was met with disdain, and it is still the case in some professions today where women make up the minority. Those who feel uncomfortable about the situation consider it outrageous that women are "trying to do a man's job". However, it was during World War II that women moved out of the home and took up positions in factories in far greater numbers than they ever had before.

Not coincidentally, it was at this time that another important truth was shattered and women's fashion also made a sudden change. Another accepted wisdom was altered; women only wear dresses and skirts. It was in fact the factory work that gave women "permission" to wear clothing that had been formerly considered strictly male attire. Though some members of society may have felt uncomfortable with the change, economic necessity due to the war effort demanded that all the workers be dressed in appropriate clothing, regardless of their gender. A woman at the top of a ladder, installing rivets on the front of an aircraft, could hardly been consider appropriately attired in a skirt, after all.

However, with the return of hundreds of thousands of service men from abroad, these dramatic changes in society would not remain. Shortly the "wisdom of the former times" would return and women were once again relegated to household duties. Yet, an important threshold had been crossed, and soon a new wisdom would be introduced to the west, via the women's liberation movement. Once more the cycle of outrage and discomfort would begin and important truths about the need for equality would emerge.

abcdef123 3 / 7  
Sep 7, 2010   #2
In the opening paragraph, You need to define the issue topic as a paraphrase and clearly define what stand you are taking on this issue (On Issue Tasks, I would suggest to use Agree, Disagree, or Partially agree rather than "This is not always the case ").

Secondly, I would rate the answer to this issue topic to be off. Here the author asks as to "Why truth is Outrageous?" which is not well defined.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,334 129  
Sep 8, 2010   #3
The essay is great. However, it is not about the phenomenon of important truths being outrageous at the start. It is about women's empowerment and society's gradually increasing sophistication.

So... the sentence about important truths is great to hook the reader's attention at the start, but it should not be the title of the essay.

I am curious about the GRE. Does a school require you to take it in order to apply? Is it a problem that this is about women instead of the concept of important truths being controversial?

If you want to write about important truths being controversial, use more examples. But as an essay about the change in society, this is excellent. The way to make it even better would be to include some facts people might not know. As it is now, you are giving an interesting discussion but not telling anyone anything new.
OP kgb66 4 / 12  
Sep 8, 2010   #4
thank you Anurag, and Kevin for you important inputs.

To answer Kevin's question about the GRE - yes there are many grad schools that require that exam for entrance consideration.

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