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IELTS TASK1 - Whether women prefer watching or participating in a variety of sports.


ronia85516 10 / 20 3  
Oct 30, 2018   #1

sports preferences among young women



The chart below shows women aged from 16 to 25 in a particular country who prefer to watch or participate in a variety of sports.

ESSAY

The chart given illustrates a variety of preferences in six multiple sports among women aged in 16-25 in a certain country.

Generally, watching and participating in tennis both play a significant role in six different sports, while women between 16-25 pay the least attention in badminton. obvious enough, these young women tend to have different interests between watching and participating in the six sports.

As observed, there are three sport games that women between 16-25 years old prefer watching more than participating in, which are tennis, athletics, and basketball. Tennis at the amount of 60% is the majority of the selected sports both in watching and participating in. What play the next two roles of watching sports are athletics roughly at 25% and basketball at 20%.

Instead of watching sport, women from16-25 in this country enjoy actually playing badminton, golf, and horse riding& racing. It is obvious that badn=minton has the least preference for participating at 20%, women also pay few attention to it by the amount of 10%. For golf and horse riding & racing, they show similar levels around 20-30% in playing such sports, while both of them share the same extent of interest in 20%.

mok 1 / 3  
Oct 30, 2018   #2
"participating in tennis" i think it is better to write "playing tennis"
" play have a significant role "
"enjoy actually" actually enjoy
Hammy 13 / 35  
Oct 31, 2018   #3
@ronia85516
Firstly, i think u should send this essay with an image which give me more information to compare if you miss anything.
Secondly, u used '' , which'' in the third paragraph, i think it's just ' which', not the comma
OP ronia85516 10 / 20 3  
Oct 31, 2018   #4
Thanks for reminding, I totally forgot to add the image. Sorry about that.
I put the chart here, and plz give me some advice. Thank you!!





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