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"women are solely responsible for bringing children up"; I completely disagree


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Nov 8, 2008   #1
Topic:Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. do u agree or not?

Essay:
I believe father and mother together make a lovely life for child, it means presence of both of them
Is necessary .actually each of parents provide a different world for child, father with leader characters like: final decider, commander, and as a person who contact with troubles, out of home always knows as hero at mind of child.

Mother with affable personage act as manager in home and always known as sacrificial and gracious person in child's life.
Optimize lifestyle for child depict in providing a pleasant environment at home and good relation between parent and financial support in professional level.
However , nowadays machinery 's life decompose family , for business problems in many
times father and mother have to live separately for long time just for earning money or satisfying Employer.
In many cases father have to work out and leave home for long time. This distance make some deficits in educating and training children and it's too hard for mother to compensate father's absence

I completely disagree with this idea, "women are solely responsible for bringing children up" .
For two reasons:
First, personality of child in age infancy grows up when father and mother affect on it together.
For example when a child fall into a trouble and for resolve it needs to father's attendance ,father has been being and it wouldn't ask it from mother or any persons, because father has a distinct personality and give a distinct method of contacting that nobodies can offer it and also it's correct for mother too.

Second , mother never can 't behave exactly like father because a woman has different view than a man.

EF_Team5 - / 1,586  
Nov 8, 2008   #2
I completely disagree with this idea, "women are solely responsible for bringing children up" .
For two reasons:

First, personality of child in age infancy grows up when father and mother affect on it together.
For example when a child fall into a trouble and for resolve it needs to father's attendance ,father has been being and it wouldn't ask it from mother or any persons, because father has a distinct personality and give a distinct method of contacting that nobodies can offer it and also it's correct for mother too.

Second , mother never can 't behave exactly like father because a woman has different view than a man."
All of this should be moved to the beginning of the essay to clarify your stance and "set the stage" for the rest of your paper.

Best of luck :)
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Nov 9, 2008   #3
Good afternoon :)
Thanks Gloria for your cooperation.
I'm beginner in English and you find funny mistake in my essay.
Optimize lifestyle for child depict in providing a pleasant environment at home and good relation between parent and financial support in professional level.
in this sentence actually i want to demonstrate the fields ,which is essential for a child,
and in next sentences i try to define , accessing to that aims containing other problems such as decomposing family.

best regards.
Masih (far friend)


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