Hi manugmc,
In this task, you have two questions to answer:
1.
Why do we need music?
you did it.
2.
Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
Here, you need more content to discuss this
more important than. If you leave this, your writing will have no salient points on the Task Achievement.
attention, memory and and judgement
It helps to improve the mood, many times whenever i feel sad or lonely, listening to music makes me feel comfortable and relax.
Two verbs here. You'd better break this down into two sentences.
Thanks.