Work topic: the expectation of job for all workers

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being

job satisfAction importance

More than 50 percent time life we spend for working that why job satisfAction is an important element of individual wellbeing. Many re search point that work enviroment, salary and promotion is the there Main factor contribute job satisfaction. And it is not easy to balance all of that for all workers.

What you looking for when you find new job? And what keep you still work for that company? For two questions, Wwork enviroment is the common answer from all most candiate. So, why enviroment? Because follow the main idea of that, enviroment include Many things arround the job such as: office, cutulre, co-worker, process, that makes people feel comfortable when work in. And deep in side the suitable enviroment which deffinally help worker improve theirself. Rếach so that people feel happy if they work in professtional enviroment alow they creative and develope their still everyday.

Beside that, salary is one of the most factor not because of money but mean about proof for their achievement. The same is with promotion. Both of that tell story about emotion in work. People always want to have great life and success in work is one of their logging.

In fact, realistic in the expectation of job for all workers is far future because not worker have the same ideal woker. Moreever, to be balance all of factors and build up great work enviroment, company policy ...which need Many effort form many party not just goverment, employee but include employer.

Anh, I am not sure where to begin in pointing out the tremendous amount of mistakes in your essay. I guess I will have to start with the basic structural problems of your sentences. Look at the way that you wrote the essay. do you notice the misplaced capitalized words which are not nouns and yet you used a capital letter to spell the word with? That is a basic rookie mistake and shows that you do are not aware of the basic English writing rules. Next, you keep starting your sentences with the connecting words "And" or "Because", both of which can only be used in the middle of a sentence that requires the connection of two separate thoughts or ideas in one sentence. These words are never used to start a sentence because there are no thoughts or ideas to connect when one is simply beginning to write his thoughts down. I also caught you using ellipses in a formal essay. You do not use ellipses in a formal essay as these indicate that there are additional thoughts not included in the presentation. If you do not present complete thoughts in an academic paper and make the professor guess, your grade will suffer. That is, unless you are writing a casual paper or a creative piece, which you are not. You must be conscious of the English writing rules and also, learn to review your paper for possible simple but avoidable mistakes such as "Wwork". This is one word that should have only had a capital W because it was at the start of the sentence. These sorts of errors show that you don't really care about doing the exercise properly, you just want to get over with it so you don't care if you make glaring mistakes. Please, learn to care about the grade that your paper will get by showing responsibility in the way that you write your essays.

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I am really appreciate your advice. Thank you so much!