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Working as a receptionist at hotel

Hoai Suong 1 / -  
Mar 1, 2016   #1
That is the introduction of my internship report, and the topic is "The reason why you choosing work as a hotel receptionist"
Could you help me edit that. And probably that essay lack of conclusion.

Nowadays, English plays as an International language that most of the people are using all over the world. It demands us to understand English deeply to use it in the life and any situation effectively. In the time of integration, most of the multinational companies and unions certainly need employee good at English communication skills and if students have the capability to do so then there would be no problems getting a good job after graduation. In specifically, tourism is regarded as a smokeless industry and to be expected invaluable contributions toward the economic development of our country. Moreover, our country is focusing on developing industrialized and service towards an industry country by 2020. Among of which special importance is attached to the tourism industry, which is considered as a key to the development of Vietnamese economy. Being a student majoring in English, I am fond of learning the multinational culture which is very important to help me expanding my knowledge and contributing to the fellowship between our country and international friends so that I choose to study further English for tourism during my practicum time. Moreover, this is also my favorite subject at university. Actually, English for tourism relates to many business fields such as hotels, restaurants, spa, travel agency, etc... as far as I am concerned, I am really keen on the work of the receptionist at the hotel- a representative of the whole (what?) to welcome guest come to the hotel, making reservations for them and attending to their other needs that are instrumental to their comfort during their stay at the hotel. What's more, I am interested in meeting and helping all kinds of people. That's is the reason why I work as a front desk receptionist at Duy Tan hotel in Hue city during my practicum time. Duy Tan hotel located in the very heart of the poetic of Hue city, being well-equipped, this is really a comfortable place for those who comes to Hue for sightseeing, relaxaion, or business. The hotel also receives a large number of foreign visitors, as well as domestic guests come to stay - a very suitable place for a student major in English like me come to digest during 8 weeks praticum. At Duy Tan hotel, I was assigned some duties such as greeting visitors, answering questions about what the hotel offers and the surrounding area, dealing with bookings by phone, e-mail, letter, fax or face-to-face...

Ssakshijain 28 / 146 87  
Mar 1, 2016   #2
Hi Hoai Suong, your prompt asked that why you chose to be a hotel receptionist? But your essay seems more like why you chose to do majors in English. English could be the reason to chose internship, but don't focus your whole essay on English. No where I can find the reason that why you are working? More than half of the essay was on English, last 4-5 lines were on other reasons. Maintain a balance, and instead of English, elaborate other reasons also. You could have chosen to work as a tourist guide, that has more chances to interact in the concerned language. So why receptionist? Bring some more reasons in your essay, then we can work on grammar and other parts :) Hope this helps:)
Lynn88Mr 1 / 16 8  
Mar 2, 2016   #3
Hi. To begin your introduction on this report, you could start introduce the tourism industry and the importance of English as the international language to the industry. Focus more on the reasons you choose to do internship in the tourism industry particularly a hotel receptionist although you are an English major student. Elaborate a bit on how your major has help you to complete your internship. Hope this will help. ood luck ! ^^
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Mar 4, 2016   #4
Hi Hoai, as I read your essay, I cant help but asked if you were able to answer the question or the prompt. What you have written is an example of what you did in your previous job at Duy Tan Hotel, this is not part of the essay at all and should not be included in your essay.

Now, here's what I suggest, if answering the prompt is not that clear, follow and answer the questions below in an essay form, this way you should be able to create a much better essay;

- what interest you in pursuing the hospitality industry
- in all the positions in a hotel, why become a receptionist
- in becoming a receptionist, you are the frontline of the hotel,
why is this important to you
- as a hotel receptionist, your knowledge about the hotel should be beyond your colleagues level, you should stay ahead of the game all the time, what

qualities do you have that will help you stand out.

Lastly, when writing an essay, review the prompt and do a little research, this will help you write a well written essay.

I hope this helped and I wish to see your essay soon.
Ester Napitupulu 18 / 25 3  
Apr 3, 2016   #5
Hii Hoai Suong..
Let me try to paraphrase some of your sentences.

Nowadays, English is the most important language since it is an International language which people use it all over the world. We must understand English deeply and use it effectively in any situation in life. Most of multinational companies and unions require employee who can communicate in English well and student which is capable in English will be easier to get job after graduation.

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