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IELTS; working and travelling a year before university is a good idea


skyman 1 / -  
Jul 15, 2014   #1
In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for year between finishing high school and starting university studies.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this

Essay

People who are travelling or working while at the high school are making the memories for their lifetime. The important fact is that people at that age see the world in completely different colors. What it means is that the perception of the world and surroundings of a 17 year old person and that of the 30 year old person varies a lot.

The advantages of the one year travel before the university start can expand the young mans horizons in many ways. They say travel broadens the mind this is true as well as the fact that travel is the best teacher as long as it doesn't cost to much for the adventurer. Furthermore some people disrespect this idea stating that life is long enough, and retirement is a perfect time for travelling. Which can be easily argued yes it is a good time for travel, nevertheless an important thing called teen spirit will be missing. In addition working before university or college help the future student to give an idea of what his job will be like and immerse himself a bit in a working world.

On the contrary the travelling and working at young ages is associated with a lot of dangers and risks. For the first a young person may lose a focus and thus giving up on the idea of entering the college or university. i

In conclusion I would love to confirm that working and travelling a year before university is a good idea which brings more advantages behind it than disadvantes . But like anything every case should be decided on it's own occasion.
MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
Jul 16, 2014   #2
People who are travelling or working while at the high school are making the memories for their lifetime

The topic focuses on people who decide to travel or work after graduating from high school, rather than those who are still high school students.

What it means is that the perception of the world and surroundings of a 17 year old person and that of the 30 year old person varies a lot.

I don' think this sentence is relevant to the topic.

the young mans horizons

young people' horizons

They say travel broadens the mind this is true as well as the fact that travel is the best teacher as long as it doesn't cost to much for the adventurer.

It is true that people can acquire valuable knowledge through travel without having to pay a high cost.

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tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Jul 16, 2014   #3
In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this

Everybody has different preference after accomplishing their study. These days in several countries, some young people are engaged to walk straight into a great job, while others prefer travelling to spend their time between graduating high school and starting university studies. However, I believe that each choice has merits and demerits.
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Jul 16, 2014   #4
People who are travelling or working while at the high school are making the memories for their lifetime.

This is not what your prompt is talking about. It focuses on how to use the gap year between high school and uni. Should students travel or work during this year or should they immediately enroll themselves with new courses at the unis? That is what you need to address in this essay. Read your prompt very carefully and align your writing with the prompt.


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