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IELTS Task 1 World Population and Comparison of Developed and Developing Countries


Citra07 3 / 4 4  
Dec 30, 2016   #1
The line graph shows the particular people in the world between 1800 and 2100. And the bar chart compares the particular people of high-income countries with low-income countries over 25 years. The high-income countries have prediction steady trend until the end of the period of 2040 from 2015. However, the low-income country will increase significantly.

The particular of people in the world increased significantly from 1800 to 1960 which had 1000 millions of people in the first period to near 3000 millions of people in 1960. And in 1960 the population increased dramatically to under 6000 millions of people in 2000. Then, the prediction will get the peak number of people in 2040 for above 8000 millions of people. The last population will decrease to under 7000 millions of people in 2100.

The prediction also showed in the bar chart. The number of particular people in the developed country will always steady from 2015 to 2040 which had above 1000 millions of people in all of the years. However, the developing country predict will increase the population to 4000 millions of people from above 2000 millions of people between 2015 and 2040.



TJLuschen - / 241 203  
Dec 30, 2016   #2
Hi, I thought your report was pretty clear, but I would make the following suggestions:

The line graph shows the [number of] people in

... 1800 and 2100[, while] the bar chart compares the [predicted population of] people

...low-income countries over [the next] 25 years.

.. countries [are expected to experienc ae] steady trend

... the low-income [countries' population] will increase significantly.

The particular [number] of people

... from 1800 to 1960 [beginning with] 1000 [million] people [in the first year of the data shown, and steadily rising to nearly 3000 million] in the first period to near 3000 millions of people in 1960. [After] 1960

... dramatically to [a little] under 6000 [million] people in 2000. Then, the prediction [forecasts that the world] will [reach a] peak number of people in 2040 [at] above 8000 [million] people. [After this apex, the] population [is expected to] decrease to under 7000 [million] people [by] 2100.

[A] {it is not really the same prediction, so we can't use "the"} prediction also [shown] in the bar chart. The number of particular people in the developed [countries of the world] will [remain] steady from 2015 to 2040 [, at a value of somewhat over] 1000 [million] people [throughout the years shown]. However, the developing [countries are predicted to] increase [their] population to 4000 [million] people [by 2040, starting] from [slightly] above 2000 millions of people [in 2015]


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