Nowadays, there had not been much of news, articles, and information about on how every individual can help preserve the planet Earth's in its natural state form.
Interesting writing style. Good intro :)
We may not be able to halthold everyone in conception;
we still have the opportunity to educate ourselves.
How about this?
we still have the opportunity to make efforts to educate ourselves and others. .... we should try to educate others as well and since you are supposed to talk about measures to arrest this problem,you need answer with a global perspective
Ok... I can see you have excellent writing skills. So you can easily aim at a very good band. Now you need to pay attention to the essay structure. They expect you to write at least four paras including introduction, 2 body paras and conclusion.
Post your other practice essay to this forum and we'll provide you with comments :)