discipline and creativity
Write an essay on the following topic:
Some people believe that discipline hinders creativity. However, others think creativity without discipline will not bring success.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Creativity is considered to be one of the most fundamental and magical abilities that differentiates humankind from other animals. Also, it expresses the true color of a human being without the influences of rules, laws or limits,.. However, there are many of us who think otherwise. They think that no matter how creative we are, we should maintain discipline. From my own perspectives, I agree that discipline and creativity should always go together.
To begin with, discipline is thought to hinder people in being creative. Keeping ourselves under rules sometimes prevent us from showing ourselves freely and accurately. As a result, everyone is the same as we all have the same standards of behaving, working, socializing,... and we fear for acting differently. The world in which we are living then starts moving backwards.
On the other hand, being creative does not mean that we can break the rules, do what we want, including ignore the moralities. In some cases, discipline draws us the line and help us know where and when we should stop our imagination from running riot. Imagine that scientists, being creative and intellectual as they are, make an advance on the world but additionally destroy the environment. Discipline is not a barrier for creativity, it helps to shape our creativity and make our ideas new, different but morally accepted.
To my way of thinking, it is ideal to put discipline and creative together. There are many reasons that make me believe this. Firstly, we are responsible for our creativity and moralities should be prior.. Suppose we make a break-through invention but that invention goes against the safety, social standards of humankind. Then, the world will be destroyed. Secondly, a creation that is new but serves the needs and rights of human, will certainly become a break-through and even a milestone in the development of the world. If we create and maintain discipline at the same time, we are being progressive instead of going backwards.
In conclusion, there are arguments on the opinion of whether discipline hinders creativity or not. However, I strongly believe that discipline is not a limitation for creativity but it guides us to create more but in a more legal, human way.@yeeeeeenvo
I like your style of writing. You presented some thoughtful ideas. However, I still have some comments on improvement.
Your first two sentences did not paraphrase the same idea as the first view in the question. I think you should revise them so that they means exactly the same as in the question. Your second paragraph said that creativity should go hand in hand with discipline in order to keep the idea morally accepted. However, what the question say is about being successful so I think that you may go a little bit off topic.
I aslo spotted a grammatical error in your fourth paragraph: creative -> creativity, you must use a noun here.
@yeeeeeenvo
Your essay is long. You should limit the words you use.
"Creativity is considered to be one of the most ..."
This sentence is wrong because you weren't told to write something on the differences between humans and other animals so there is no need to mention this at all.
It should be 'including ignoring the moralities'
In your fourth paragraph, 'creative' should be ' creativity'.
Also the essay you wrote did not relate much to the question you were asked. It was "creativity without discipline will not bring success". Instead of discussing success you discussed disasters which is the complete opposite.
