Write a letter to the landlord of the apartment you rented and ask for the return of your deposit

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You paid a refundable deposit when you rented an apartment. You left the apartment in good condition but the Landlord won't return your deposit.

Write a letter to the landlord.

In your letter
·explain why you are writing
·ask for the return of your deposit
·inform the landlord of possible legal action

Dear Mr. Lincoln,

I am Cheryl, a resident of Weston apartment, living in room 3A on the ground floor. I am writing this letter to request a refund of my rental deposit that I have paid before moving into this apartment.

Last month, we both met and signed the termination of rental contract, I have also cleaned up the house and fix any breakages to ensure that the apartment would be returned in great condition. According to the contract, I would be eligible to receive the refundable deposit within one week since the date of signing the termination of lease agreement; however, two months passed by, I still have not received my previous deposit yet.

I believe that I have complied all the terms and conditions of the agreement so I respectfully request that my deposit will be repaid in the early of this month. If we both are incapable of tackling this case in a satisfactory manner, I will have no alternative but to seek legal advice.

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully,

Cheryl Wong

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In the first part of the presentation, you failed to mention your whole name at the start. There could be 2 Cheryl's living in the building so you have to be clear about your name. You should also make up information regarding the duration of the contract you signed and the agreement within it regarding refunds of your deposit. The ruling regarding the refund is indicated in the rental contract You should not be referring to a termination of rental contract in the essay because the instruction is based on the actual rental contract. That is where the refund is indicated. You are adding information to the essay, which will affect your TA score.

Mention that the landlord refuses to refund your deposit before saying that you believe you met the terms of the contract. Then refer to seeking legal advice is need be. At the moment, you seem to be harassing your landlord for no reason. The letter is a bit incomplete in certain aspects. Make sure you address the needs of the letter, based on the given (not added) information, and ensure that the reason for your letter is always clear before making an claims as indicated.