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Task 2. Write about: laziness and how it influences our life


Thanhvp 1 / 1 1  
Jul 31, 2017   #1
Please help me check my essay. Thank you.

Please write about: laziness.

The effects of laziness on your life?



There is a truth that never changes: laziness is a disease having no preventive vaccine. Everyone over the world, whether they are, may be lazy at any time. Despite negative impact, I firmly believe that laziness could offer many interesting things.

Nowadays, the workloads and work pressure are getting more intense and have increased the stress level of many employees. Many people feel tired, depressed and hopeless due to their boring routine activities that seem to reduce the meaning of their lives. Therefore, losing the motivation to succeed makes them become lazy. This made me remember a famous quote: "On the way to success, there is no trace of lazy men". Hardworking does not ensure success but successful people must work hard. So, if we have a dream, we should remember grit is the key to make it become true. The power of passion and perseverance helps us overcome difficulties and obstacles to enjoy the sense of achievement.

On the other hand, we cannot deny laziness is a motivation for creation and invention. Bill Gates once humorously said that: "I will always choose a lazy person to do a difficult job... because he will find an easy way to do it". I know a poor worker was bored with his repetitive job. So, he strove to find a new way to do it easily and automatically. The worker in this story is Elias Howe who invented the sewing machine that changed the world industry. His laziness made him become a great inventor.

Therefore, if you consider it is difficult to leave your comfortable bed tomorrow morning, maybe this is the time for you to abandon old routines. Do not stop imaging about the fabulous things ahead and looking for new challenges, your laziness is a relaxing moment before continuing your life journey.

Holt - / 7,527 2001  
Jul 31, 2017   #2
Phan, the essay is asking you to discuss the effects of laziness on your life, not the life of other people. Therefore the response that you wrote is incorrect. You wrote about a general observation regarding laziness instead of how laziness affects your own life. The approach to the essay should be as follows:

Everyone tends to be lazy some days, most days, or everyday. I am one of those people who tends to be lazy most of the day. While I realize that laziness prevents me from having a productive day, I still find that I cannot bring myself to accomplish necessary tasks and chores. Which leads to some very negative effects in my life.

Take for example, when I wake up in the morning, I lie in bed an additional half an hour. Even though my alarm clock keeps ringing, I keep on hitting the snooze button an extra ten minutes. The result, is a rushed start to the day. I end up late for school, late for my extra curricular activities, and late getting home.


What I wrote is an example of how you can start an essay with this topic. The focus of the essay should clearly be on you by indicating times when laziness has had a negative effect on your life directly. It should not refer to other people because the essay asks about the effect on you. So the pronouns, "Me, my, myself, I" will be in play for this essay.
OP Thanhvp 1 / 1 1  
Aug 1, 2017   #3
@Holt: thank you for your help.

I have rewritten a new one. Please help me check.

To be honest, I am quite lazy. My ideal day is a day having nothing to do. Although I realize that laziness prevents me from productive working, I cannot get out of this situation. Laziness really leads to some negative effects in my life.

Every morning, despite the clock ringing, I begin a new day by lying in bed for an additional several dozen minutes instead of getting up to exercise. So, I often have breakfast in a hurry and then go to work late.

At work, I never start my job until the day before the deadline because I think I have a lot of time. Hence, my boss often complains that my working schedules are always late. One time, he was so angry because I only focus on facebook but forgot my responsibility.

Especially, I am afraid of doing housework. Just thinking of washing dishes, cleaning floor also makes me feel very tired. I prefer surfing the internet on smartphone or watching TV.

Now, I am striving to change my old routines in an attempt to be more active. At first, I try to go to bed early so I will not find it is difficult to get up in the morning. At the office, I make a check list of tasks with deadline I must finish and restrict myself to use Facebook. I ask my colleagues to remind me frequently. I also help my family to do chores. I believe my situation will be improved if I try my best.


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