People can save endangered animals by some means.In the first place,natural conservations should be build as many as possible.These conservations not only provide animals with safe enviroment but also enable them to hunt for food freely.Besides,scientist have chances to do research about these animals.Another measures is that government should be introduce strict laws to ban poaching.It is believed that endangered animals is critically threatened by poaching,especially in Africa.Finally,pepple shoudnt purchase production made from endangered animals.There is a great numbers of tiger,elephant,polar bear killed for fur,irovy,etc per year.All in all,protecting endanger is the responsibility of all over the worl.It is high time people did something to maintain biodiversity of the earth
Pham, the first thing I want to point out to you is that you have to be careful of the way that you spell the words you use in your paragraph. Make sure that you spell the words in the proper manner. Avoid using text spelling such as "pepple shoudnt". It should be spelled out as "people shouldn't". Make no mistake about it, you will lose points for wrong spelling so this early train yourself to always use the formal spelling of words. Whether taking a test or simply learning ESL, you need to make sure that you come across as academic and professional in nature, and that is done through the proper spelling of words.
Another point of correction:
Another measures is that THE government should be introduce strict laws to ban poaching
I had a difficult time reading your paragraph because, while your sentences made sense, you neglected to separate the sentences by hitting the space bar after you completed a sentence/thought. Without the separation between sentences, it seems like you are not capable of separating your thoughts. It is simple enough to remember, hit the space bar each time you finish a sentence.
Your essay shows an ability to think logically on your part. The essay shows a coherent flow of thought and a talent for writing. You just need to practice writing in order to continue developing your thought, logic, and writing skills.
Thanks a lot @vangiespen for your help.I am going to take my entrance exams in July,and the writing seems so difficult to me.Thanks to your advice,i believe that i can make progress in someday :D
Another thing:so sorry for not hitting a space bar,which made you find it unconvinient to read my essay
