ledungmi 1 / - Sep 15, 2016 #1Yesterday, after five subjects at school, I felt so tired and hungry. So, I wanted to go home quickly. Because I was in hurried, I rode my bike so fast. Suddenly, a traffic accident happened, it made all people and me frightened. Fortunately, It didn't happened to me and I felt so lucky. I think that it is the most frightening experience in my life.
MingWaiS - / 3 Sep 15, 2016 #2Because I was in hurry... it made all people and I frightened.I think that it was the most frightening ...
kiki23 37 / 64 4 Sep 15, 2016 #3Hi! I have some advice for you:Avoid the repetition of "I" and add some conjunctions to make your writing or speech more subtleFor example:After having five subjects at school, I felt so tired and hungry. Those reasons made me ride the cycle faster than it should be. All of a sudden, a shocking accident frightening all of the people including me happened. I am so lucky that it is not happen to me and it is obviously the most frightening event in my life.