While the writer more than met the required word count to gain proper scoring consideration based on each scoring consideration, I am afraid that the writer has not come up with a passing score essay. Although he explained himself in an acceptable manner in the paragraphs, the fact that he misrepresented the original topic and did not provide the correct response format for the discussion are the reasons why the essay cannot be considered for a passing score.
Please take note of the original topic presentation:
Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime
The writer misunderstood the topic for discussion and presented it as:
It has been argued that the reduction of crime rate will be accomplished more effectively through more qualified education rather than prison sentences.
The correct restatement should have been:
Most parts of the world try to resolve criminal problems by placing offenders in prison. However, there is a growing trend that advocates for proper education as the better way to prevent crimes.As for the writer's opinion, The original presentation requires a single supporting opinion for one of the two opinions. The question was never based on "To what extent" or "Discuss both opinions", which are the only writing instructions that allow for a comparison opinion presentation. So the writer failed to offer a single clear opinion on the topic. His opinion was not based on the proper response format.
The start of the essay was already incorrect so the TA score will not be a passing one. Since the TA preliminary score is the foundation of the final overall score, the writer will not be able to meet the overall passing score consideration.