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The 60-year period brought some massive changes at the West Park Secondary School


La Baso 15 / 22  
Apr 11, 2016   #1
The diagrams show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its contraction in 1950.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant


The maps inform about the changes that have occurred in West Park Secondary School over 60-year period beginning in 1950 and ending 2010. The most noticeable change is the replacement of both houses and farmland with the most proportion of car park in the last period.

To begin, in the first period, there were only four major infrastructures. The first was houses that were located in left side and near in the main road. However, the buildings were replaced by two different public facilities in 1980, in the right side was car park which only existed in this period and was replaced by part of car park in 2010, and the left was science block which was part of school. Next building was school which was beside the houses. In addition to this, the main building of school did not experience a change until the last of period.

There had also been changed in Farmland located behind the houses. In 1980, it experienced a change to sports filed and finally was replaced by car park area in 2010. The last is playground which stayed behind the school and experienced a small size in 2010 due to sport field was being moved to the part of it.




nabila05 8 / 12  
Apr 18, 2016   #2
Hi, Baso. Here I want to give you some suggestions and corrections relating to your writing. Please mind the suggestions and corrections below:

1. Suggestion
- You should give at least 1 space for every paragraph that you make because it will ease the examiners to read and make some corrections towards your essay

- Your writing should consist at least three main structures divided into three paragraphs: introduction, body, conclusion
- Please write enough words because the more words you write, you more mistakes you are likely to make. The ideal is to aim for between 160-180 words in the report (writing task 1).

2. Corrections
- over a 60-year period beginning inbegan on 1950 and endingended on 2010.
- was replaced by part of a car park in 2010, and the left was science block which was part of the school.
- In addition to this ,
- until the last of the period.
- a change to sports filedfield

There you are, Baso. I hope you find my feedback is helpful towards your future improvement in IELTS writing. Keep writing and good luck :)


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