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The year of 2009 saw a dramatic increase in Japan's sale of hybrid vehicles


wulanbila16 14 / 7 5  
Feb 1, 2016   #1
The given bar chart illustrates data about global sale of transports using both fuel and electricity in USA, Japan, and other countries from 2006 to 2009. Overall, it can be seen that America had the largest number of hybrid vehicle sale in the first three years, but Japan came out top in the last year. Also, the total sales in 2009 increased just over two times than that in the first year.

In 2007, the number of America's hybrid transportation sales rose rapidly from 250,000 to 350,000. It was the highest level of sales during four-year period. Unfortunately, it decreased to almost 300,000 in 2008 and dropped again in 2009 to 280,000.

In contrast, Japan had upward trend over four years. In 2006, it had the same number of sales as other countries, only just over 50,000 sales. Then, the sale number increased slightly in 2007 and 2008. 2009 saw a dramatic increase in Japan's sale number by 250,000. In that year, Japan dominated the sale of hybrid vehicle. Meanwhile, other countries only increased steadily during the period.




aflah15 32 / 18 4  
Feb 1, 2016   #2
...The given bar chart illustrates data about THE global sale of transports ...
...Also IN ANY CASE, the total sales in 2009 increased just over two times than that in the first year.
...In contrast, Japan had AN upward trend over four years. In 2006, it had the same number SIMILAR PATTERN of sales as other
...Then, the sale'S number increased slightly in 2007 and 2008.
Arundyna 12 / 16 2  
Feb 1, 2016   #3
Halo @wulan nice to read your writing
it good, but i will give some suggestion in order to discuss
here I rewrite your first and second sentence.

The given bar chart illustrates data [....] times than that in the first year.

A breakdown of the global sale of transports using both fuel and electricity in the America, Japan, and other countries over the course of three years is illustrated in the bar chart. Overall, it clearly can be seen that the hybrid vehicles which sold increased dramatically. In any case, the USA was the country with the largest total of buying.

In 2007, the number of America's hybrid [....] dropped again in 2009 to 280,000.

Between 2006 and 2008, the number of the exchange goods in Japan and other countries recorded slight increase. Begin with both area which stood at around 50,000 sales in 2006. In addition Japan has gradual fell to approximately 300,000 in 2009, while other remained unchanged figure for the entire period.

In contrast, Japan had upward trend [....] increased steadily during the period.


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