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When I was 8 years old, I learnt how to play a guitar and sing popular songs


Ricardo 1 / 1  
Jun 8, 2014   #1
I wrote the following text:

"When I was about eight years old, my parents gave me a guitar and paid a particular instructor to teach me how to play that instrument and sing some popular songs. I enjoyed very much that lessons, and started to buy regularly specialized magazines with popular songs and ciphers, so that quickly I was able to learn how to play songs by myself. The authors of the songs were, in the beginning years, Brazilian popular artists, and eventually, my interest migrated to the English composers, particularly "The Beatles" and "The Moody Blues". When I became a teenager, Brazilian's government was a dictatorship, and my favorite composer was Chico Buarque, whose songs criticized the regime with subtlety intelligent lyrics, and I've learned to play and sing almost all of his compositions. Well, I continued to play and sing in the high school, in the university, and even after started working on my job. I started to date my current wife in a party, where we've sing some tunes together. I've singed to my daughter and friends until I was about forty years old, and after that, I didn't want to do it anymore. Maybe, in the future, I have the mood to play and sing again."

Is it OK?
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Jun 8, 2014   #2
Can u please post the prompt? What is the aim of this essay?

so that quickly I was able to quickly learn how to play songs by myself.

---> I prefer to use "After a short time" instead of "quickly".

eventually, my interest migrated to the English composers (why???) , particularly "The Beatles" and "The Moody Blues".

I've

Do not use constrictions in writing (if it is a formal writing)

I didn't want to do it anymore.

Why???

Good luck,
Cheers,
Ahmad
OP Ricardo 1 / 1  
Jun 9, 2014   #3
Thank you, Ahmad, for your contributions!

Answering your question, it was the first time I entered this site, and I didn't know how to classify my text. Objectively, I've wrote that essay in order to train my English abilities.


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