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Young people in today are less dependent on their parents than in the past.


liwenxin 1 / -  
Feb 17, 2012   #1
Contemporarily,the reason why the youth are more independent than in the past,which may,firstly is the education they received.In addition,they have to be more independent because of their parents'busy work.Moreover,due to the advanced technology,the youth are likely to solve their problems through the Internet instead of asking their parents.

First of all,most teenagers were encouraged to be independent at school. Not only did teachers taught students that you'd better do your own things by yourself,but always praised those who were less dependent on their parents.This behavior indicates that students who want to be outstanding in the future are supposed to be independent.And since most of them have an ambition to be excellent,they would try their best to complete their things by themselves. In addition,many teenagers study in boarding schools and come back to home once a week.Since,they do not have enough time to stay with their parents, they have to take care of themselves when they are at school.Little by little,those students become able to deal with most daily problems by themselves and be more independent.

Nowadays,entangled with endless work,most parents do not have enough time to take care of their children.Thus,the youth have to focus on their study and daily life by themselves.Instead of asking their parents,young people have to finish their homework and review what teachers taught by themselves.In stead of waiting for cooked and delicious meal,they need to take a long time to do this "back-breaking work"in the kitchen and make a meal after their endeavor.Even though young people are likely to face a large amount of obstruction on their own,their independent characteristic,which is very important to their future success,has been cultivated.

While the two factors I narrated about are convincing,the highly advanced technology is also a reason.Young people sometimes would like to ask many odd questions to their parents who, at most time,do not have enough time,idea,and tolerance to give a satisfying answer.With the spread of computer and Internet,young people no longer need to wait an answer depending on their parents'knowledge,time and mood.Surfing the Internet,they are able to get a more specific , accurate and abundant response.On the other hand, because of the more convenient technology,such as MSN or ICQ,young people are not always limited to communicate with their parents.However,they prefer to share their happiness or sadness with their peers thorouth those instant communication tools since they have more in common.

In conclusion,thanks to the education,parents'busy work and the Internet,young people in today are less dependent on their parents than in the past.
robust 2 / 4  
Feb 17, 2012   #2
Your three reasons are quite convincing, but the article lacks comparision. I mean that you should add more information to illustrate that why people in the last are more dependent on their parents, you can get a higher score and express yourself well through these comparision.

Contemporarily,the reasons why the youth are more independent than in the past,which may,firstly is the education they received.In addition,they have to be more independent because of their parents'busy work.Moreover,due to the advanced technology,the youth are likely to solve their problems through the Internet instead of asking their parents.are various, namely, the education they received, their parents'busy work and the advanced technology
goku123 8 / 16  
Feb 17, 2012   #3
an important mistake: the last paragraph should not only has one sentence.
Try to balance the length of each paragraph in your essay.


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