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IELTS; Today young people are finding it harder and harder to find permanent jobs!


Shumaila86 11 / 31 9  
Jul 3, 2013   #1
In many countries, young people are finding it harder and harder to find permanent jobs. Why is this? What can be done to improve the situation?

These days, everyone wants a respectable job after graduating from college or university; however, finding a permanent work has become difficult for youngsters. There are many reasons creating these issues regarding jobs, and their solutions are also discussed in following paragraphs.

First of all, universities train their students only theoretically and do not support them to enroll into various workshops and internships. Therefore, problem arises when companies give permanent job opportunities only to experienced applicants because they do not have to train them. Moreover, untrained fresh graduates are big threat to the companies. In this way, younger people have to struggle harder in order to get decent jobs. However, an obvious solution for this issue is that universities should offer internships to their students in vacations or arrange workshops in addition to the class work. This will help students to get training and experience in their corresponding fields.

Secondly, increasing unemployment rate is another reason for this situation. After leaving university, young people, who are desperate to start earning money, end up accepting any job without considering that it offers only temporary contract and less salary. Furthermore, companies also exploit such newly graduates as they work more for less salary. Therefore, those who have experience and good grades in colleges or universities are declined, for they demand high salaries with permanent contracts. A good idea to solve this issue is that special awareness programs for students, who are leaving universities, should be arranged in which various job offers and their benefits would be discussed. In this way, students will be able to choose right jobs for themselves.

In conclusion, I believe, young people only need right guide given by their teachers and parents to get a respectable job that helps to build their future.

carolyn 2 / 7 1  
Jul 3, 2013   #2
Shumaila86

In many countries, young people are finding it harder and harder to find permanent jobs. Why is this? What can be done to improve the situation?

These days, everyone wants a respectable job after graduating from college or a university; however, finding ]permanent work has become difficult for young adults.. There are many reasons creating these issues regarding jobs, and their solutions.

First of all, universities train their students only theoretically and do not support them to enroll into various workshops and internships. Therefore, problem arises when companies give permanent job opportunities only to experienced applicants because they do not have to train them. Moreover, new graduates are a big threat to the companies. Younger people have to struggle harder to get decent jobs. However, an obvious solution for this issue is that universities should offer internships to their students, or they could arrange workshops in addition to the class work. This will help students to get training and experience in their corresponding fields.

Secondly, an increasing unemployment rate is another reason for this situation. After leaving a university, young people, who are desperate to start earning money, end up accepting jobs without considering that temporary contracts might offer less money. Furthermore, companies also exploit new graduates, as they work harder for less salary. Those who have experience, and good grades, in many colleges or universities are declined, for they demand higher salaries with permanent contracts. A good idea to solve this issue is special awareness programs for students, who are leaving universities. These programs should be arranged with various job offers , and with benefits options. This way, students will be able to choose the right jobs for themselves.

In conclusion, I believe, young people need to be guided by their teachers and parents, to get a respectable job that helps to build their future.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jul 3, 2013   #3
First, I wish to request you to have a meaningful topic for your essay when you open a new thread (you need to do this in the "subject" field). This is an important thing if you wish to earn good feed backs from others and also it's the forum rule.

There are many reasons creating these issues regarding jobs, and their solutions are also discussed in following paragraphs.

There are many reasons that contribute to this problem.

First of all, universities train their students only theoretically and do not support them to enroll into various workshops and internships.

First, the universities offer their students a more academic based curriculum which does not adequately provide students with a good practical exposure to gain knowledge as to how they could apply the theories in practical scenarios.
OP Shumaila86 11 / 31 9  
Jul 4, 2013   #4
Pardon me for breaking the rule. i will follow the rule next time. thanx
regards
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jul 4, 2013   #5
no worries ;)
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Jul 4, 2013   #6
Secondly, an increasing unemployment rate is another reason for this situation.

...You need to mention a reason why unemployment rate rises. Unemployment is the topic and you need to provide reasons for why it's happening.

Secondly, the economic down turn faced by many countries today is a major reason for hiking unemployment rates in their countries.

After leaving a university, young people, who are desperate to start earning money, end up accepting jobs without considering that temporary contracts might offer less money. Furthermore, companies also exploit new graduates, as they work harder for less salary.

This situation has given rise to higher demand of labor supply in the market since the economy fails to expand and create more job opportunities for the graduates. Therefore, the employers are in a position to exploit the situation offering lower salaries to graduates and adopting "hire and fire" policy with temporary contracts.
OP Shumaila86 11 / 31 9  
Jul 5, 2013   #7
hi Pahan! I really appreciate your time and efforts to check my essay, but I feel the corrections and suggestions are quit complicated for me because you are obviously an excellent writer. The thing is, all I want is 7 band score in IELTS and last time I got 6.5, I want some suggestions that would improve my writing style, vocabulary and how I make my argument effective. And sometimes I do not understand where I am mistaken. so, please help me with vocab and grammar as much as possible. Thanx

Regards.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jul 5, 2013   #8
:D ...looks like you've got confused with Pahan's rephrasing. Well, it's your topic that has complicated things more. It's a pretty serious topic compared to other IELTS topics. Do not worry and you would keep Improving with practice. I suggest you to read the following essays to get a better understanding about the essay structure. They are pretty good and by reading others' good essays help you pick points and improve your writing.
OP Shumaila86 11 / 31 9  
Jul 5, 2013   #9
thank you very much Dumi... Upul is a perfect writer, no doubt. I hope I will do well in IELTS tomorrow. this forum helped me a lot in preparation, and I wish to continue getting advice from you regarding writing skills in future. thanx again
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Jul 5, 2013   #10
Sorry... if I confused you.... You write well. I think I have written too much economic stuff with my re-phrasing. Forget it!

thank you very much Dumi... Upul is a perfect writer, no doubt. I hope I will do well in IELTS tomorrow. this forum helped me a lot in preparation, and I wish to continue getting advice from you regarding writing skills in future. thanx again

Wish you all the best Shumaila! Stay calm - you can do a good job at the exam! Good luck!
kawsneffect 8 / 37  
Jul 6, 2013   #11
Much of the corrections has been made. However, I will say this

I would leave out "and their solutions are also discussed in following paragraphs."


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