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Nowadays young people spend too much of their free time in shopping malls.

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Jun 1, 2020   #1

Shopping effect on teens

It is clear that spending too much time for shopping centres is a tendency of teenagers in modern world. Personally, although there are many bad impact on young people and society, going to shopping also has some benefits on them.

Ono the one hand, shopping addiction is the main key, which will make troubled finance and some society issues. In fact, teenagers willing to pay a large amount of money without wavering for an unnecessary thing as long as they are interested. For example, young people who are big fan of Iphone

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 12,839 4175  
Jun 1, 2020   #2
Your essay is incomplete. You need to post the complete prompt and the full 250 word minimum essay discussion to receive a review from anybody, not just a contributor at this forum. Your current work is so incomplete, it is not reviewable. You should post a new essay, this time with the complete prompt and completed discussion so that you can receive a proper review from everyone here.Your current post does not deliver a clear idea regarding the topic, discussion instructions, and writing approach. So I am afraid I cannot help you with advice for this particular essay.

The essay is left on a hanging discussion point. It does not have a clear purpose nor discussion target. I believe you were not able to properly address the original prompt, even without seeing it. I am basing that comment merely on what you have written so far. If I knew more about this discussion, I could explain to you how to better your writing for this task.

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