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More and more young people are turning to drugs. reasons and solutions


kissingyou0912 8 / 29  
Jun 16, 2012   #1
More and more young people are turning to drugs. Why is this so and what can be done about the problem?

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Drug (addition ) addiction has become a serious problem(s) in our society. More and more young people are turning to drugs at an alarming pace. Although mis(u)sing drugs obviously have a negative effect on (their ) one's life, this can be caused by (a lot of ) collective elements from (various) different sources. (As a result, strategies are being created to reduce the drug abuse in society.)

In the first place, "Curiosity" is the utmost reason of increasing misuse of drugs among teenagers.(can be put down to curiosity. )In fact, by their very nature,(people,particularly the) young people have curiosity ( a tendency to have an interest )in achieving or discovering something new,( stimulating and) or unknown to them. However, (only with) such one experimental try, (they can become) can transform them into habitual (addicted to) drugs user. Ultimately this might become daily routine and the more they consume, the( greater )demand and search for more and stronger one continues.(they have for them.) In addition, the young can be coaxed by other people arouind or even by their own friends. As they are young and impressionable, they are vulnerable to immitate others. (become targets and can easily to be taken in.) To make the matter worse, they are probably not fully aware of the consequences as well as the damages (of using) the drugs might bring, particularly at such an early age.

(Moreover, )in most cases, youngsters (start) turn(ing )to drugs when they are under psychological disturbances (pressure or upset about something). They may use drugs as an temporary escape (of) from (depression) feelings of sad ,(and) lonely, or unhappy (these people). For example, the young may unable to cope with growing family problems nowadays ;hence, they consider taking drugs as a solution to their issues. At first, they may find it helpful to ease the feeling of pessimism. Howevere, sooner or later, they steadily incease the dose and cosume more and more everyday until drugs become an indispensable part in their life.

Thus,as drug addiction has become a threat to the society, leading to( maney )other social problems (and crimes) such as thefts, suicide and other crimes (robberies, stealing. urgent action is necessary to be taken)Both individual(ly ) and social(ly) action is necessary in formulating (. As a result, ) strategies (are being created) to reduce the drug abuse( in society).

Most importantly, the (young) teenagers ( try not use same words many times) need to take responsibility of their life and keep away from drugs. As a matter of fact, they can prepare themselves by understanding (the knowledge of drug including the ) symtoms, consequences and the ways to avoid drug- misuse. Additionally, youngsters can take part in various social activities such as playing, volunteering, community gardening etc. to distant themselves from drugs ( communicate with other people and make friends, ) leading towards an optimistic and useful community life. If there are in trouble, they may talk to someone who is able to understand and help them out of the problems.

Secondly, family plays an important role in resolving the problem. Young(e)sters need support from parents as well as relatives since these people tend to have a strong influence on them. For example, parents should pay more attention to their children, making sure they( hang out ) are in touch with right types of people. Parents also should cultivate good habits in order to be a role model of their kids. Similarly, it is helpful that parents encourage the young to participate in social clubs to improve their communicative skills and make friends.

Last ;but not least, solutions can be found by building a friendly and hospitable environment at home, school and in society for the young. (Youngsters should be well educated when they are still at school by applying more social programs as well as more ) Extracurricular activities( to discuss about the aftermaths of drug use), sharing bitter experience of past drug-addicts and their current improved lifestyle, educating about the effects all contribute . (Everyone should make an attempt to eliminate illegal ) drug(s) abuse and create a healthy surrounding ( for young people).

In conclusion, drug use is on the rise ( and an increasing number of people have become additicted to drugs). Although it is impossible eliminate it in one day, (we can make ) Continued (an) attempt to control and reduce it gradually plays a massive positive role both in family and community. As far as I am concerned, the young ( had ) should be able to share their feelings with parents, teachers or others (better live an open life) so that the community can help in case of need.

plz help me with this assignment! any advice is appreciated !

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jun 16, 2012   #2
although using drugs obviously have a negative effect on their lifelives.

This problem can be caused by a lot of elements from various sources. As a result, strategies are being created to reduce the drug abuse in society.

a lot of elements from various sources ----------- this confuses the reader and make him feel that you have used inappropriate words. Why not simply tell '' a lot of reasons ''?

strategies are being created ------------ strategies are being adopted

the increasing use of drugs among teenagers can be put down tocaused by curiosity.

In fact, people, particularly the young, have a tendency to have an interest in something new, stimulating and unknown to them.

----------- very true

As drugs have become a threat to the society, leading to maney other problems and crimes such as thefs, robberies, stealing, urgent action is necessary to be taken both individually and socially.

I feel this should come to your introduction. In body paras you need to give reasons for why youth getting attracted drugs and what remedial actions can be taken to save them from this ill fortune.
OP kissingyou0912 8 / 29  
Jun 16, 2012   #3
thanks very much dumi. I really appreciate it. By the way, I have been told that reading is also necessary to write well. Can you tell me where can I find good essays? so I can practice my reading skills and improve my writing as well. Thanks in advance !
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jun 16, 2012   #4
Yes... By reading the essays others have written, you can improve your writing a lot. They help you come out with good arguments, provide you hints and tips. Also you get exposed to different writing styles. You can find many good essays in this forum. If you pay attention to the comments provided for them, you can get lots of tips to improve your writing. Hope these are useful :)

Are you preparing for TOEFL , IELTS or GRE ?
OP kissingyou0912 8 / 29  
Jun 16, 2012   #5
these are very helpful. Thanks again, dumi.
actually, I am not preparing for TOEFL, IELTS or GRE but in reality I am taking part in a competition in July so I just wanted to improve my writing generally. a friend of mine told me about this website and I am glad she did as essayforum is really interesting. Everyone is polite and devoted. by the way,:D

Thanks !
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jun 16, 2012   #6
Yes.... this is forum sets an example about the good things that social forums can do for the society. This is really a cool place which offers something very meaningful!

Okkkkkk... you are making a good effort to improve your writing skills. That's the only way you can improve too :)

Toefl and IELTS topics are good for you because they are generally simple themes that anybody can tackle.
EF_Susan - / 2,365 12  
Jun 19, 2012   #7
Drug addition has become a serious problems in our society. More and more young people are turning to drugs at an alarming pace although using drugs obviously have a negative effect on their lives. ..As they are young and impressionable, they are vulnerable to become targets and can easily to be taken in... Moreover, in many cases, youngsters start turning to drugs when they are under pressure or upset about something. ...For example, the young may be unable to cope with growing family problems nowadays ;hence, they consider taking drugs as a solution to their issues. Howevere, sooner or later, they steadily incease the dose and cosume more and more everyday until drugs become an indispensable part in their life...(keep in mind that there are also many "happy" elite, young, rich and popular young people that do drugs just for the fun and percieved sense of glamour.) As drugs have become a threat to the society, leading to many other problems and crimes such as thefs, robberies, stealing,choose one; they all mean the same thing..

`, drug use is on the rise and an increasing number of people have become additicted to drugs.these alarming statistics are tragic and Although these are problems impossible eliminate it in one day...,If we work together as a society to focus on means to solutions and recovery, rather than punishments and dismay, we may come close to beating this dilemma alltogether I made a suggetion for a closing statement, and one that seemed more "final". I hope this has been helpful.
OP kissingyou0912 8 / 29  
Jun 21, 2012   #8
thanks, susan! this is definitely helpful. I usually don't know how to introduce and summarize smoothly and impressively :(
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Jun 21, 2012   #9
I usually don't know how to introduce and summarize smoothly and impressively :(

before writing a paper/essay or in general a text, you should highlight the key words of the topi that u want to write about. In this way, you can limit the ideas in your mind. I think, the most important think for writing a short "introduction" or "conclusion" is that to improve the ability of "brainstorming". In addition, I recommend you to read the book entitled "focus on vocabulary". This book is is a vocabulary book, but it also consists of interesting, useful texts which can show how to begin an introduction in an attractie way, and how write a summary.

Regards
Ahmad
OP kissingyou0912 8 / 29  
Jun 21, 2012   #10
Thanks for your advice ah_zafari. I don't know if I can find the book but I will try my best to improve my vocabulary. thanks a lot !!!


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