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Youth and Technology combined no doubt will bring a very aspiring future


Geist 4 / 3  
Jul 6, 2008   #1
Youth and Technology

The greatest breakthrough in technology have been started during the mid 20th century and so forth and we the generation Y and even younger of the late 20th century have fell victim to the rise of gadgets. Technology like cell phones, mp3 players, computers, TV, video games and so forth are some of the gadgets that most of the kids in North America own or experienced. It has been noted that technologies have been more integrated in our lives effectively than those that are older than 27 for example Generation X. Technology although distracting for the youth does however bring a lot of positives to the table! A cell phone for example can be used to help the parents check on up theirs kids status outside at night and for the kid it is a great social connectivity tool ranging from talking to his/her friend to even asking questions regarding the latest homework assignment. Youth and technology combined no doubt will bring a very aspiring future for our generation. (JEREMY Remier and WARREN BUCKLEITNER)

Did I correctly implement my source into this paragraph (the authors name) and also the two authors wrote two separate articles and they are two seperate source is it still ok citing like that! Please aslo read my paragraph and tell me desired areas for further improvements and or enhancements!

EF_Team5 - / 1,586  
Jul 7, 2008   #2
"The greatest breakthrough in technology was started during the mid 20th century and we,Generation Y, and even younger of the late 20th century have fallen victim to the rise of gadgets. Technology like cell phones, mp3 players, computers, TV, video games, and so forth are some of the gadgets that most of the kids in North America own or have experienced. It has been noted that technologies have been more integrated in our lives effectively than those olderthan 27; for example Generation X. Technology, although distracting for youth does however bring a lot of positives to the table! A cell phone for example can be used to help parents check on up theirkids outside at night; for the kid it is a great social connectivity tool allowing him or her to talk to his or her friend, to even ask questions about the latest homework assignment. Youth and technology combined no doubt will bring a very aspiring future for our generation. (JEREMY Remier and WARREN BUCKLEITNER)"
OP Geist 4 / 3  
Jul 7, 2008   #3
Hy Gloria, Thanks for helping me with my paragraph! As you may or may not remember it is evident that I am not very good with keeping the same tense throughout the text and I was wondering how I could fix this problem. English teachers always recognized this problem in my paragraphs and such but they never had time to help me clarify a rule for me to keep with.
EF_Team5 - / 1,586  
Jul 7, 2008   #4
You are very welcome.

Tense is something that all writers, no matter what their level, have to be mindful of. Some find it easier to write in the past tense than the present tense, but not everyone is like this. Pick a tense that is comfortable to you; it will probably be the one you find yourself talking mostly in. As for "rules", the best way I can suggest is that if it happened in the past, stick "ed " on the e nd . If you are going to write in the present tense, there should be no "ed "s.

The best rule of thumb is just to read through your work (maybe try it out loud) and see if it makes sense; this can be very difficult, especially when you have read through something so many times you can recite it in your sleep. If you can afford to, put your essay away for a day or two and don't read it; when you go through it after being away for awhile, things like conflicts in tense jump out at you. Otherwise, there's always the old standby of having someone else read it for you, which I am always very happy to do. :)

The more you practice, the better you will become. Keep up your hard work.


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