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Zoo has no useful purpose. Do you agree or disagree?


nil 1 / -  
Aug 31, 2015   #1
people are busy in their hectic schedules. For refreshment, they visit some places to spend time with their friends and families. Most of people had visited a zoo at least once in their life.Some people claims that zoo has no useful purpose and some believe that it has some purpose. Coin has two sides. So, i believe that zoo has some advantages and disadvantages too.

In zoo, different species of animals and birds are kept. So, people can see them actually. They can touch them, feed them and get information about them by observing them. They can learn many things about them and identify them by their behavior and looks.they enjoy the time with families and get relax by visiting zoo.zoo saves many different species which are on edge of extinction. In zoo, animals are well treated. In some zoo like safari park, big area is given to animals to provide natural habitat. zoo is the place for any age of people. zoo gives opportunity to earn daily breads to many people. We can not preserve the all species. So, our future generation will see the animals only in pictures if they are preserving. Zoo has many useful purposes. It is the part of development of country.

However, I think animals in zoo, can not live their life as they live in forest. We are providing them great care and large area but still not able to provide the wild atmosphere.In this advance technology time, we can see these animals on television on discovery channel, history channel and get the information through internet which is posted or published by experts and photographers.

in conclusion, i believe that zoo saves some endangered species and provide the great care and environment. But on the contrary, it has some drawbacks also for animals. but still zoo has lot of advantages and useful purposes over disadvantages.

lcturn87 - / 435 236  
Aug 31, 2015   #2
Hello, I can help you with this topic. I went to the zoo twice this year. Here are some suggestions for your essay:

1st paragraph: Here is a suggestion for your first sentence: "Many people are busy due to their hectic schedules." This sentence needs to begin as "Most people have visited..." The next sentence needs some corrections: "Some people claim that a zoo..." Coin has two sides. Remember to capitalize "I".

2nd paragraph: You should combine the first two sentences: "In a zoo, different species of animals and birds are kept so people can see them." Remember to capitalize "They" at the beginning of your sentence. Change the word order in this sentence: "Families can enjoy their time together and relax by visiting the zoo".

Now, I would like you to start a new paragraph with this sentence.
"Also, the zoo saves many different species which are on the brink* of extinction." "In a zoo..." Change the next sentence: "...zoos like a safari park, a big.." When you begin the next sentences, I think you should place "The" before zoo.

*Some may use the term brink to describe extinction.

Daily breads should be "work". This sentence can be changed: "We cannot preserve all species". The last sentence should read: "It is the part of the development of a country."

3rd paragraph: "However, I think animals in a zoo cannot live their life as they live in their natural habitat". Place "a" before large. Place "the" before internet.

4th paragraph: Remember to capitalize "In" and "I" at the beginning of your paragraph. Change the word order in the last sentence. "However, the zoo still..."
Samuelsam123 12 / 46 20  
Aug 31, 2015   #3
Hi nil !

I think for these kind of essay topics, you are suppose to pick a side. If you are on a fence, your essay's "survival" depends on the examiner.

1st paragraph: Maybe try a moreinteracting opening paragraph if you are doing a slightly informal essay
For Example on the topic of Child Safety :
"Have a minute ? Right , that is all you need to keep a child from potential disasters. "

Try this
Always wanted to have a glimpse of animals that you always see on book or television ? Then visit the Zoo !

With that opening , you have already chose your side.

2nd paragraph: So, people can see them actually , I know what you mean. but maybe write it in another way ? Try the word 'Face to Face'

In zoo , Change to in Zoos,

"zoo gives opportunity to earn daily breads to many people"
What does this mean ?
We can not preserve the all species. So, our future generation will see the animals only in pictures if they are preserving.
Kinda confusing ,
I think what you mean is :
If we don't continue to protect these animals , our next generation may not have the chance to have a look at them.


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