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TOEFL essay: Zoos have no useful purpose. Agree/disagree


maryna_lm 3 / 2  
Nov 29, 2008   #1
TOPIC:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A zoo has no useful purpose.
Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

ESSAY:

Have you ever seen a real life bear or a monkey? If you did, it was probably at a zoo. Zoos are big outdoor spaces in which different animal species are kept, so that people can look, learn and admire them. A lot of people think that zoos have no use, or provide no purpose. I strongly disagree with this affirmation because I believe zoos provide social interaction, education, and develop qualities such as animal respect and understanding.

When people visit the zoo, they normally do it in a group, with their families, or as a part of a school group activity. In the zoo they interact with each other and are able to relax and look at the animals, play with some of them, comment on their appearance and behavior, and laugh at their funny customs. Nowadays families do not spend as much time together as they used to a couple of decades ago. The zoo is a great reason for spending time with the family, it is a great activity that can be enjoyed every family member, from little children to grandparents.

Animals, the different species, their habitats and behaviors are a subject of study at schools and universities. We can learn a lot from books and lectures, but there is an even better way to learn, that is visuals and personal experience. If you visit the zoo, you get to watch the animals, their customs, what they eat and how they eat it, as well as which characteristics the different species have. In the zoo you can see an animal and their different variations, the male and the female or the baby and the adult. It offers a great opportunity to observe their reactions to different situations, such as weather, specie and genre interaction, defense behavior, or protection of their babies. Moreover, it will also help identify which animals could be dangerous. Visiting the zoo would help the students understand what they learn at school.

Finally, a visit to the zoo will help increasing someone's respect and appreciation for animals. It is a lot easier to appreciate something after you have seen it, and learned from it. This is especially true for people living in the city, where the only animals they normally interact with are pets like cats and dogs. In the present there is a lack of respect for animals. Being able to see the animals in real life and learning facts about them would help by making people aware of the importance of animals and the respect they deserve.

The reason why most people oppose to zoos is that in some of them the animals are not very well taken care of and they do not have good and clean facilities. This is mostly true but does not relate to the purpose of zoos. It would be great if every zoo kept the animals in perfect conditions, but regardless of the condition, zoos are very useful.

EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Nov 30, 2008   #2
Have you ever seen a real, live, bear or a monkey?

When people visit the zoo, they normally do so in a group--with their families, or as a part of a school group activity.

The reason for much criticism of zoos is that in many of them the animals are not very well taken care of and do not have good, clean facilities.

This is mostly true but does not relate to the purpose of zoos.

Very good, you made several points to support your argument. Now add a closing paragraph that restates your argument.

:)

Kevin
OP maryna_lm 3 / 2  
Nov 30, 2008   #3
hi. Thank you for your comments. very helpful.
Do you know what score this essay could get on the TOEFL?
thanks a lot
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Dec 1, 2008   #4
No, I only know about editing. However, I know some Native speakers of English who do not write as well.


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